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Thread: If I .Wasn't. Invisible ft. Koalatee & Auspicious

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    If I .Wasn't. Invisible ft. Koalatee & Auspicious

    Auspicious, M~M, Koalatee

    I’ve lost sight, I’ve lost sight of flaws
    But what’s not right, I haven’t lost it at all
    Being a nobody, I wanted everything
    But now being a somebody, I want to stop remembering
    You dream of what fits, n your fresh to re-act
    Or that’s what it is, til’ you have their breathe on your back
    A rep to up-hold, somebody elses’ ambitions
    Truth never told, but this was life you wish you were livin
    Your who’d you’d die to be..back and thru mistakes
    Now your only privacy, comes in bathroom breaks
    Followed constantly, every move has been tracked
    But now honestly, you pray you could take it back
    You lied.. because you thought it would help
    But your so recognized, you don’t recognize yourself
    Like this from now on, n you’ve fought for it
    But now you want it gone, n’ don’t know why you wanted it
    minds astray, you’d stop at shoulders
    n’ from day to day, it’s the same process over
    My life could be miserable, for this I am sure
    To everyone, I am invisible.. I just live life like I weren’t..

    If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
    N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white
    Maybe to prove I’m real I’d have to scrap n fight
    But I’m invisible…
    so they cant censor whats written on this pad tonight.
    If I weren’t invisible n you could know its me
    Maybe it would be convoluted music, no longer poetry
    Maybe I’d have the elders of white America scoldin me
    Showin me as a “thug” – There would be no Emcees
    I would carry an assumption, that I’m carrying something
    And intimidate people just off of the nuthin…
    That I carry around. A stereotype always wantin to fight
    If I weren’t invisible… I’m most likely carryin a gun or a knife.
    But its right. Cuz when you’re seen its more than lyrics
    Give you what u have for who u are… then turn and fear it
    But I’m the invisible… so what I say now – its nuthin
    I love this art... but if invisible, I wasn’t – then fuck it

    A controlled crowd’s paroled mouths seem dismayed in this disparity
    Whilst the individual remains foolish enough to convey his insincerity
    I stand corrected & pallad-faced, amongst both leaders & poets
    With nothing to submit, my voice drones & my demeanor is stoic. .
    A breeze bites my neck, a tightened check greets the new layers
    As they enter the square, a mass euphoria defeats the doomsdayers
    An enormous, collective sigh. . Trust, that the pulse was as loud
    But not so punctuated, for its noise became engulfed by the crowd
    The time arrives, we tried to hide – a willing cast with lassoes. .
    Captured minds & hid their souls, whilst the buildings cast the shadows
    We were in Times Square, New York - & I shuddered in wealth
    For it was a cold, winter day when I had finally discovered myself. .



    -III-




    Thanks for the view even if no replies...
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    ...surprised this is getting slept on...



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    agreed...
    we did dope.. all of us
    whoop whoop
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    This piece is missing something.....Hmmm~~~oh yeah.......Me

    Anywho...this piece made me realize...I need to step my game up...

    Aus-First piece I read from you(Other than SS)..I'm impressed!

    M~M-I'm glad you were a no show at SS(or else I would've took a L..maybe?)

    Koal-Blah~~~~Blah~~~Blah`~~

    <-I was supposed to be in this collab...but I was too lazy to write a verse and I ended up using my verse at SS..Against M~M...LOL

    You guys did a 'Fantastic' job

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    all 3 good pieces...koalatees was a lil' different n didn't seem to fit in as much but also may have had the best verse...it was just more complex n mixed up with that vocab of his
    aus is great at throwing in the emotion... always a good read & this was a good few lines from you.. ur flow..is just something i can relate to when i'm reading it
    MM nice job my man
    here's something i loved and other people fail to feel the right way about it...

    If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
    N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white

    ^yes rhyming with the same words...everytime i did that they lacked to see the emotion n emphasis put back behind that... good job... verse connected well

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    thanx...
    I dont know you that well but everytime you
    use the same words make sure they have
    different meaning. If they dont see the skill
    behind that... then its because they dont have
    it. Thanx Again.

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    WOW... incredible piece... Do not know why you're getting slept on.
    amazing... simply amazing
    The Mentation...

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    nice collab.... first 2 styles were the same
    but diff concept of thought...nice shit
    good flow nice lyrics vocab

    last one was the best...great range
    of thought and metaphors...the vocab
    was used precicsly

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    thought it was a pretty nice piece...all three contributing to the topic nicely...aus opened it nicely...MM um yours was good kinda confused me but most likely the weaker of the three......K yours was a beaut i enjoyed it...thought of it as a poem though..but nice nice and nice

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    you have to post two links to feedback you left, or this is closed.
    yeah, new old rules again.
    wordperfect?
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    Nice piece...
    Good read..


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    dis was a pretty dope drop with some good concepts involved in it here and there...jus keep on getting better like you always do........wordplay was also very creative..........................keep up da work.
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    This was dope guys. . Every verse had meaning and hit the topic on point even with 3 different trains of thought. . flow was perfect in each. . Multi's were tremendous. . Definately helped the flow. . Vocab was incredible in Koalatee's verse. . and just as good in all others. . Mystery, this is the first i've read from you, and you definately put a good impression on me. . Aus, I think i've read from you before, you are good man. . I'll quote my favorite lines from each verse. .

    Mystery -
    A rep to up-hold, somebody elses’ ambitions
    Truth never told, but this was life you wish you were livin
    Your who’d you’d die to be..back and thru mistakes
    Now your only privacy, comes in bathroom breaks

    Auspicious -
    If I weren’t invisible maybe you would see the black n white
    N the raps I write wouldn’t just be black n white
    Maybe to prove I’m real I’d have to scrap n fight
    But I’m invisible…
    so they cant censor whats written on this pad tonight.

    Koalatee -
    An enormous, collective sigh. . Trust, that the pulse was as loud
    But not so punctuated, for its noise became engulfed by the crowd
    The time arrives, we tried to hide – a willing cast with lassoes. .
    Captured minds & hid their souls, whilst the buildings cast the shadows

    Overall, I must say I liked Koalatee's verse the best, but this was really dope on all behalfs. . great job guys. . Pz.

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    ^^^ got mine n Aus's verse mixed up.
    But thanx for the view anyways......



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