Topic: "Things aren't always what they seem"
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ILLunatic
Topic: "Things aren't always what they seem"
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-IN- keying now!
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over 300 posts to vote
Y 300+?
thats jus random lol
Is the Divide that big?
Settling differences is easy
just try a lil..I know you have
but try a lil harder........
coz even tho ya'll want whats best
for the site....
we all know that
Things aren't always what they seem!
We witnessed a predictable not fictional squabbling mess
Jus' an overated confliction between The End & CProgress
A cross dress..of thoughts, that both were hated & Loved
While watching on these changes from the powers above
I gived up..on the idea that there may actually be peace
no more bitchin' at the table for the Administrative leace
It was there for the Keep...but more Moulding went astray
Two Admins in alliance??..hell no..I say "that'll be the day"
When the skies turned grey..there was a divide in the letter
W/ all the RB originals saying "We're just that much better!
Ima pre-regretter, a futurist...wishing that things Hadn't been
& everyone knows.."Things aren't always what they Seem"
A crease so crisp N clean..a stride by each forum every Minute
There's no race & no glory!!..yet they're so desperate to win it
The RB power is Infinite..no matter how many peeps disrespect
Every person here adores the site..& they hate to be the reject
So what do I elect?!?..The End,Strobe & Progress both settle up
B/coz bickering over a Canyon just gives sighs of....*WTF*....
Or should I jus Shut up? but I'm just an Rb adorer spitting Views
& am sure none of this contingency wants RB to become "Old News"
Just views no hate...
Props to admins etc
I know ya mean well
Notice that things aren't always what they seem to be
I always seem to see and think, that bad is the only thing to be in me
Frequently my thoughts are troubled, i just get so confused
Mentally abused, my conscience is twisted in a heavily feud
My mind is in subliminal conflicts, i can't handle this nonsense
I was beatin as a child, then i grew up and haven't visited my mom since
She raised me to be what i grew up to be, and i grew up to see
......What a bitch she was to me......
But now i notice things aren't always what they seem to be
Momma was obsene to me. For me she paid no attention
We had no connection, i wanted to be noticed so i got detention
And the bitch still didn't notice that i was a piece of existance
My life only needed assistance, but she showed full resistance
And ignorance to her son and own fleshing blood, can you imagine?
What it'd be like to die in the day, and everyone could careless ta what had happen
You have no idea, the pain and stress i sufferd was uncontrolable
Its unknowable, the love i always drempt about was unshowable
But words are yet to explain the life lived by me
But i still remember "Things aren't always what they seem to be"
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Blah.. you got 2 more lines then me
But oh well...............................
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We witnessed a predictable not fictional squabbling mess
Jus' an overated confliction between The End & CProgress
A cross dress..of thoughts, that both were hated & Loved
While watching on these changes from the powers above
I gived up..on the idea that there may actually be peace
no more bitchin' at the table for the Administrative leace
It was there for the Keep...but more Moulding went astray
Two Admins in alliance??..hell no..I say "that'll be the day"
When the skies turned grey..there was a divide in the letter
W/ all the RB originals saying "We're just that much better!
Ima pre-regretter, a futurist...wishing that things Hadn't been
& everyone knows.."Things aren't always what they Seem"
A crease so crisp N clean..a stride by each forum every Minute
There's no race & no glory!!..yet they're so desperate to win it
The RB power is Infinite..no matter how many peeps disrespect
Every person here adores the site..& they hate to be the reject
So what do I elect?!?..The End,Strobe & Progress both settle up
B/coz bickering over a Canyon just gives sighs of....*WTF*....
Or should I jus Shut up? but I'm just an Rb adorer spitting Views
& am sure none of this contingency wants RB to become "Old News"
^^ " this was MADD hot, loved ur wordplay, word usage, i loved everything about it...but it lacked the MAIN parts....u missed some imagery(notbad) and the topic was hard 2 follow and not right on...the topic was good..but not what was looked 4..ya dig
flow... 8/10
wordplay...8/10
structure..8/10
imagery..6/10
vocab/wordusage/...7/10
ON TOPIC....6/10
overall......43 ....GREAT JOB...IF THIS WAS JUST A REGULAR PIECE..IT WOULD HAVE BEEN RIGHT ON!!!
ILLS VERSE
Notice that things aren't always what they seem to be
I always seem to see and think, that bad is the only thing to be in me
Frequently my thoughts are troubled, i just get so confused
Mentally abused, my conscience is twisted in a heavily feud
My mind is in subliminal conflicts, i can't handle this nonsense
I was beatin as a child, then i grew up and haven't visited my mom since
She raised me to be what i grew up to be, and i grew up to see
......What a bitch she was to me......
But now i notice things aren't always what they seem to be
Momma was obsene to me. For me she paid no attention
We had no connection, i wanted to be noticed so i got detention
And the bitch still didn't notice that i was a piece of existance
My life only needed assistance, but she showed full resistance
And ignorance to her son and own fleshing blood, can you imagine?
What it'd be like to die in the day, and everyone could careless ta what had happen
You have no idea, the pain and stress i sufferd was uncontrolable
Its unknowable, the love i always drempt about was unshowable
But words are yet to explain the life lived by me
But i still remember "Things aren't always what they seem to be"
^^^ ( " ill..ur strong points came..and hit just as hard...ur flow was good, wordplay was very very nicely laid, but u had strong points he didnt..that was ur IMAGERY...and ur great ON TOPIC verse...u kept in ur structure..and rules...
flow... 7/10
wordplay...8/10
structure..7/10
imagery..8/10
vocab/wordusage/...7/10
ON TOPIC....8/10
overall......45 .... ill...u fell in some of the things he DID WELL IN...but then hit harder with the things he lacked...in all u hit the TOPICAL BATTLE a little harder then he did
OVERALL....this was one of the closes battles ive seen in a long time...but i feel as a TOPICAL BATTLE illunatic, brought the whole package...and therefor just barely stretched out infront of B.I
good luck 2 the both of you...
vote..ILLunatic
A.rtificial I.ntelligence
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BI...You missed out on imagery, but wordplay was nice.
I liked your piece, but I definitly thought the topic
could have went deeper than RB, and would have been
more effective that way. Nonetheless, good wordplay,
good flow. Good overall piece.
Ill...I really liked what you did with the topic. You used
great imagery, and your flow was good. I definitly was
feeling that rhyme scheme too. Overall, that was a
GREAT piece. Only thing you could work on would be
not repeating the topic so much. Actually, don't listen
to that. It was effective, it just was a lot of times to use
it in a small piece, but...idk. I did kinda like that.
Anyway. Good job guys. But V/Ill.
I love topical battles....it's a lot more difficult the just personals an puncheslines.....
B.I. I felt you weren't true to the topic.....you had more of a mention than anything....it was a dope verse but like I daid the topic wasn't really followed.....
As for Ill you were true to the topic mostly throughout an I felt the emotion strongly integrated in your verse......dope.....
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UPPIN#2
This was my 4th topical ever..
I guess i'm doin pretty good
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^^^damn I can't spell for shit.....I'm on my cellphone so I reedited it here it is.....sorry I didn't just hit the edit link......like I said on the cell I can't find it lmao^^Originally Posted by ELEETE
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Yea i read tha three hundred post rule, but does that count for me 2??? A former executive and friends to both of you??? So i'm gonna post a reply but no poll vote unless both of you accept my vote..& trust me i know how bad you both hate losing lol..& if you can't think of who i might be, think of the executives and who you don't see any more, but was one of tha best textcee's anyones met lol, damn i got too high esteem lol..
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Bid-Wow, what skill and talent, when i finished your verse, i was thinkin what could top that, you had descent vocab that matched well with your verse, I liked you approach, it had to do with tha site, very original..Wordplay was off tha chain like it always has been after i koed you and you elevated and koed me lol..Tha feeling behind your words were amazing, and it flowed descently..Storytelling was nice too, very proffesional..What else can I say, tight verse..
Ill-Your flow is tight, always has been, thats definately one of your strong points in this battle..Vocab was good aswell, about tha same as bids tho, no biggie, you should know i'm not tha one to care much about vocab..Your wordplay is sick, another strong point of yours, wordplay is what made your verse..Tha storytelling was good aswell your definately a writer not a fighter lol..The feeling was deep, and i think you should take a look at my open mic piece wid diverse, it's about families, and i knoe you could relate..Even tho family issues have been done before, you still approached it in a differant way and created an outstanding verse..
Wordplay-Illunatic
Imagary-Tie
Flow-Illunatic
Feeling-Tie
Originality-Bid
Structure-Tie
Topic-Bid
Overall vote...based on the verse that reached and hit me harder...I would have to say bid won this..It's too close to a tie to vote on just tha category's above...I think bid won this because of his originality and his amazing imagination..Won't poll vote untill both of you agree that i can..
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Oh and go vote on my battles for me lol, i can't copy and paste so just look for them, it might even give you a clue on who i am..
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lol..I guess I just dont always bore myself w/ the old topicals
everyone follows nowadays!! I jus try and create freshness
which I knew I did here. jus dont like following the same
patterns of love 7 abuse like many peeps do nowadays
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