Turning it 'Round

[Endeva.]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116153
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=116179


What have I done, shit… im trippin, what have I begun
I never listen now it’s too late… another Dev aint won
Can’t graduate, seems im the brother destined to failure
Im on the last rung of the ladder, my mother say’s “I hate ya”
“Cant believe I created ya!… but I receive what I deserve
…It aint displacia…
And it’s too late to reverse… like… aint done the course work
The sparks lost its light, it wont ignite… it’s a self murk
A suicidal hurt inflicted thru boredom and self-absorption
And drug, drink, social dilemma I chose over futures endorsing
Should’a never, it aint clever… now where am I at
Im into rap, typing, producing, whatever… the whole track
But I could catch back what’s missed if I quit using
Lay off the fusion of abusing, ive got a week til the conclusion
…Wtf… who am I fooling…
While I’m writing this its more time wasted… it’s self duelling
One sword against the other and my study’s losing
But I can’t afford to mess up I’ve been down that road before
I fucked up… this is the final door and ive ran out of keys
There’s no more… I gotta face reality before im left on my knees
So this is it, it’s a break for me… I gotta think mathematically
Cos study + me – RB = pass in my faculty
Then no worry!… Then beats’ll flurry and continue my tapestry
Cos the tragedy would be failing in the last quarter
and I aint derailing my backup, sick of drowning in the water
It’s decided… ive prioritised… I’ve set it in mortar
Now it’s down to hard work, a final attempt to avoid slaughter

[FreeThinker]

Dev you dont understand how much my school has been second to writing OM's... am going through simmilar problem of putting this site away for a bit. hehe GOOD PIECE as usuall , nice flow vocab structure wasnt all that great seen you do better. Wasnt bad either. Another good read

[L0st S0ul]

Nice drop, you amaze me with your flow and wordplay, cuz every piece i seen from you has excellent, and i really mean excellent, flow..Good imagary, not a bad topic, i was feelin where you were comin from..Overall it was a nice piece, keep droppin those bOMb's..Check my piece wid Diverse "Family Failures" if you'd like..
~1~

[Endeva.]

thx.... uppin

[Endeva.]

OM is seriously going down the pan......

[rule]

This was a good drop, very good emotion with indepth lines and nice questions i enjoyed the concept...structure was good etc...good vocab...i liked this...it was well writtin...shouldnt be slept on...peace

[Endeva.]

thnx man.. i like to keep it real to me...so...

[anarchy2856]

rhyme was tight, and more importantly....FRESH
1st script ive replied 2,stay true 2 yaself, fuck da haterz PEACE OUT

[Slayer]

I like the rhyme, i found it had a really good flow, and nice wordplay, and overall it was realy good, keep it up.

[Genazyde]

Flow - Tha flow was nice, I've seen you come better, kinda fell off in places, cus of tha alternated structure you sometimes had, but overall, tha flow was nice...

Structure - This in points had fallen off, like tha lines 'Lay off the fusion of abusing, ive got a week til the conclusion'

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'…Wtf… who am I fooling…' but if that line was in an audio and tha beat had paused for a second, then it'd be tight, like what Jay-Z has done a few times...

Overall - This was nice, but tha structure of tha rhyme kinda made me think that it was a lil' rushed, but in other points you'd come back wit suttin' kinda hott... 7/10, stay up

[Endeva.]

thnx... every time i use dots there's a pause.... but i guess it flows better if you know how to spit it right...... but appreciated...

[Diverse]

damn Dev, another badass piece, it's funny how well i can relate to this, i've been falling behind in my college classes a lot to keep up my time on RB, it's like a lifestyle of it's own and you very well capturedt the effects of it...okay well i'm off to drop feedback on your other piece w/ Eleete...pz homie