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will a peer
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I got something in store for me that'll be whacker than driving range lurkers/
Bitch sells out more quickly than 10 cent Micky-D hamburgers/
When I'm done, kid gonna touch the rainbow like skittles/
I'm gonna correct his posture and "accidentally" shatter his spine like PEAnut brittle/
They call me Endoplasmic,
I'll release fluid rhymes to make this grub disinegrate and go to cell/
Pierce his nose with my finger and lift him up like a barbell/
Guess who's back and I'm STILL 50 times better than you/
Specify the track, i'll Murder ya and take your Cents too/
Face the facts, your brain attracts bullshit like a Hoover/
To pry you off my dick I'd need a crowbar and some super-glue remover/
Make it 10-12 lines.
ur the fat ass that buys all the burgers when they're on sale
do u got mad cow or r u scared? cause ur lookin kind of pale
for real though kid whats up with all the played out lines
2 many losses so he left the other site mayb it was a sign
from god tellin u that u dont belong in this rap game
his 1st single's a remake of insane in the membrane
im a chick and i wouldnt jump on that even dick if i could
u wish i would kid c's his mom andhis dicks as hard as wood
whatever i didnt really try bcause today was 1 of my disarrayed days
im about 2 get praised then again i would vote for him i heard he pays
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Good match man. This should be pretty close I think. Uppin for votes.
WTF, common peeps. Don't sleep on this please, judge this shit!
I got something in store for me that'll be whacker than driving range lurkers/
Bitch sells out more quickly than 10 cent Micky-D hamburgers/
opening was alrightfor this battle, although you could have evened out the bar syllables to help flow a little an added more inners wit your overall rhyme scheme
When I'm done, kid gonna touch the rainbow like skittles/
I'm gonna correct his posture and "accidentally" shatter his spine like PEAnut brittle/
the lines are ok and you have alright metaphors really but your lacking direction in your verses yea mean kid? your going for alot of similies that could be better done with wording to make them alot more dope.
They call me Endoplasmic,
I'll release fluid rhymes to make this grub disinegrate and go to cell/
this bar was alright, although the flow needed work the concept was insightful to its own wat, and had a good concept on it.but it was lacking punch
Pierce his nose with my finger and lift him up like a barbell/
Guess who's back and I'm STILL 50 times better than you/
best bar in this battle, athough it still lacked punch the concept was a little played but not by any of the newbies on this site. good ish although you needed a punch/diss kid
Specify the track, i'll Murder ya and take your Cents too/
Face the facts, your brain attracts bullshit like a Hoover/
good connection over the bars that makes for a dope verse. the hoover line was a good switch on how most people would use it. the punch in the follow through was ok but you needed more strenght in the diss
To pry you off my dick I'd need a crowbar and some super-glue remover/
this ending was alright a little played though. i like it a little bit but your flow through the bar count off and thats what hurt you in the end.
Alright now listen, your verse wasnt that bad, you had alot of similies and metaphors in there, with that bit of word play on 50 which was dope in a way. BUt you lacked direction on your punchs, which was hurt you, your flow could have been better and had more multis, you dissed but needed more to it you know what i mean?
ur the fat ass that buys all the burgers when they're on sale
do u got mad cow or r u scared? cause ur lookin kind of pale
openign was alright. you had a god connection through your bars, flow was nice, metaphor was ok
for real though kid whats up with all the played out lines
2 many losses so he left the other site mayb it was a sign
follow through could have had more to it. a better set would have worked it out
from god tellin u that u dont belong in this rap game
his 1st single's a remake of insane in the membrane
there alright disses but your falling off, your opening was good. here the punchs arent connecting to the other lines well enough
im a chick and i wouldnt jump on that even dick if i could
u wish i would kid c's his mom andhis dicks as hard as wood
this bar needed work on wording, and could have had a better punch to it
whatever i didnt really try bcause today was 1 of my disarrayed days
im about 2 get praised then again i would vote for him i heard he pays
heh, alright ending. concept was ok i suppose. now the connection with the bars could have beensorted out better, although you had a punch it wasnt that strong of a diss and needed a little more for this closer
Over all you had pretty constant punchs throughout the match . yu dissed MUCH more than Sticky did, however you needed better metaphors in your verse. your flow was alright but the rhyme scheme needed better inner rhymes to really help the flowing sound of it. also the strength in your bars needed work to.
vote- Will A Peer
Took it with more constant punchs really.. this was a very close battle though and i dont normaly say that. Sticky took the majority of this battle as far as what was in the verse, however Willapeer just edge it out with more constant more directed punchs.
Good battle though cats.
Peep this and drop an honest vote then ill come back an Poll vote
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115298
Vote on the poll man and upping for a few more votes.
If you vote I will return the favour.
This is the last time I will bump this for awhile, but don't sleep!
Upping for the final time.
Don't sleep!
Common.
If you want people voting drop votes.. hit every battle up honestly stop upping so much it cloggs the thread and is pointless free posting. I try not to up my post unless its on the 2nd page.. i havent seen yours drop off the first HALF of the first pages, now quit.
Can a mod delete the usless parts of this fucking battle?
dis one goes to mc for hot rhymes,and some nice creativity
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sticknicky
I got something in store for me that'll be whacker than driving range lurkers/
Bitch sells out more quickly than 10 cent Micky-D hamburgers/
-ha! i wish those were still around
When I'm done, kid gonna touch the rainbow like skittles/
I'm gonna correct his posture and "accidentally" shatter his spine like PEAnut brittle/
-blah pretty weak and played
They call me Endoplasmic,
I'll release fluid rhymes to make this grub disinegrate and go to cell/
Pierce his nose with my finger and lift him up like a barbell/
-again not too great
Guess who's back and I'm STILL 50 times better than you/
Specify the track, i'll Murder ya and take your Cents too/
- i see the wordplay, prolly would go over some peoples heads
Face the facts, your brain attracts bullshit like a Hoover/
To pry you off my dick I'd need a crowbar and some super-glue remover/
-eh kinda weak closer
will a peer
ur the fat ass that buys all the burgers when they're on sale
do u got mad cow or r u scared? cause ur lookin kind of pale
- weak and you feed off his verse
for real though kid whats up with all the played out lines
2 many losses so he left the other site mayb it was a sign
- again too simple
from god tellin u that u dont belong in this rap game
his 1st single's a remake of insane in the membrane
-plaaayyyeeeddd
im a chick and i wouldnt jump on that even dick if i could
u wish i would kid c's his mom andhis dicks as hard as wood
-what did you just try to say??
whatever i didnt really try bcause today was 1 of my disarrayed days
im about 2 get praised then again i would vote for him i heard he pays
-no punch
vote stickynicky better verse with more punches
pz
Can you guys vote on the poll please or can a mod edit the poll?
vote/ will a peer
he had beeter flow punches structure opening was bad tho
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