Topical: TheUnderRated (I.J.L.) vs. Accelerate (Wits End)

[SmokaJoka]

Topic:
The Apocalypse
20 lines max
drop by Tuesday Feb. 16th Midnight...or anytime before
no dickryde/crew/fan votes

Judge The Rhyme, Not The Crew

peace

[TheUnderRated]

word i'll check in its .....11:34 my time on a beautiful friday night......good topic...lots to play with.......pz

[TheUnderRated]

i'm ready to drop if this kid would ever check in.....................not droppin til me does.....pz................

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

In...I'll have something done whenever..BTW..the TOPIC SUCKS

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

I walk..entrusting my every muscle coordinates with the next
Instead, I'm thinking that a next step I'll regret...
A step that can be so big, Something thats so changing to Life
Or a small enough step, like to write what is Right..

So yeh..I take many steps..as subways enter through the Scent
An old man with a cardboard sign..Or a Psychic telling us to Repent
It didn't make a difference then, As in that Future is right Now
If I could've changed things then, I probably wouldn't be here now
Not that I'd die or something either...

Im waiting for the 5 Train, true to his name, Its more or less 5 min. late
I stand by the gate, Watching Time Passing by..
Looking at the time on the Watch, Standing on the Gate...
So yes..everything became still, and the Old Man disappeared..
I felt it near, everyone vanished, never reappeared..
I watched Time Pass Me by, And the Apocalypse Passed..
Time ages too.. And Passed by, as the Cardboard Old Man...

blah.

[TheUnderRated]

Total devastation, the ultimate ending, ever nearing due to perpetual time...
through methods humans uncomprehending, will come judgement of the divine...
the clouds break asunder, the warrior prince's steed is heard in the distance...
demons take heed, the prophecy to be fulfilled, as evil is banished from existence...
human kind in awe exhaults their heads to the heavens...
to behold vicious beast and holy warrior clashing clothed in white linens...
with the holy spirit as there sword weilding faith as thier only shield..
human and angel allied together as one now storm the battlefield...
Demonic souls, forsaken the fallen left in slaughter a wordly bloodbath...
as the four horsemen are summoned by heavenly trumpets to enact thier wrath...
famine and disease spread, fire rains from the welkin(vault of heaven)....
Angels stand poised with 7 bowls of God's wrath awaiting the ceremony to begin...
Lucifer summons all his might but his feeble attempts are in vain....
fallen from the lords grace hath he, now destined to be slain....
locked away for thousands of millenia yet never to expire...
and by God's grace he will once again direct the angel choir...
These last days, shrouded in suffering, deliverance, and gore...
will end with the combining of Earth and heavenly our current statis ...no more...
Apocalypse by definition is teh presentation of God and his grace...
and we will all bow down with hands meekly over our eyes, for we dare not gaze on his face....

[TheUnderRated]

aight then lets see if any topical heads are awake at this point and time of the night

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Lol...Good verse...Two Different styles..Aight..lets see sommin.

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Up you sleeeeeeeeping faggots..Somebody needs to win this battle.

[TheUnderRated]

uppin times two this battle is more slept on that a warehouse full of serta matresses......alright leave links i'll do what i can............................................... ..............

[High Class]

Accelerate - You did okay, but it was just to simple. No hate or anything, the structure was straight. You had okay vocab, and did alright with the topic. It just didnt grab my attention as much. Cause with this topic, you can put great emotion into it. It was just average to me, wasnt something that really got me to want the next line even more. Keep elevatin hommie...

The Underrated - This was better than his. I felt you could maybe shorten the lines a little, and maybe a little more emotion. I liked the vision you put in my head, and you did alright with the topic. You did good with the vocab, it was evened out very good. Nice work on that area. I know you could have done better. It was a good verse. Nice drop...

Vote - The Underrated

Conclusion - I just liked his more over all, he got my attention more. He brought a better feel to it from my perspective. Topic could have been used alot better from both though... Straight Topical battle...

Please return the favor and check the battle in my sig with thrust. It would be much appriciated. Please take the time on that, like I took my time on this... thanks

[deacon]

alright i checked out both and honestly the emotion was there on both pieces i enjoyed reading.....Accel you seemed to have good structure but it made your piece look small a couple of your rhyme scheme were a bit typical but you held strong...Under your piece was dark and gloomy man kinda barbarrack in its own sense i really enjoyed your ending lines...and it makes me think of that day when we go see god/jesus....

amen

vote---under

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113908

please hit this up its being slept on

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[TheUnderRated]

upppin x3......bitches... this crew battle is already over plz help us out and vote on it drop links i can hit up any battle not in elite...aight then sweet pz out.

[TheUnderRated]

upppin x4 leave your links guys and i'll vote on your shit this battle is so old its sad really........hit it up pz

[Meks.]

this was a decent battle.... good topic....
Under - liked your approach ... you were consistant with the topic... vocab was good and flow was ok, but ya lines were a little stretched.... still i felt.... u expressed everything well....imagry was nice and i liked the way u decided to present the apocolypse....good verse

Acc - nice verse from you too ... u took a different aproach than under did ... but i liked the story and u were consistant....u did kinda lose me at one point but otherwise it was ok... flow was good structure too ... imagry was nice ... and i liked the way u presented the topic too...good job

overall i think that the 2 diff. styles coliding here made for a good battle.... and both of you presented it in diff. ways so it was hard to choose.... since both stories were pretty good ...i'm voting Under for the vocab & description ... his verse was simply more intriging and i felt like it was the better one.
V/- under

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...8&page=1&pp=15