MaNdiBUS it might be hard to diss you bcus i only no your name,
nah i chew up emcees like you thats how i got my fame,
lacking straigh punchs. self boasting really. ok attemp, thought you were going some where with the follow through.
yup look in my sig thats whos to blame,
my punches are like your face gaurantying people pain,
could have been better dun. follow through was a weak punch but hey at least it was a punch yea mean? metaphor could have been better.
dnt question my potential im a burning falme./
This is just another Win on my battle record,
flow came off.. sorry kidd-o i give bar by bar break downs.. 2lines-1bar.. no punch or metaphor here.. self boasting aka filler type ish
damn my second punch and your already floored./
im sure im rite in think this is your first battle thread,
eh, weak.. the follow through could have been alot stronger with your punch. could have used a dope metaphor
so ima end your career quick with infa-red to your head,
aiight time to say goodnight with my last bullet to your head./
there are no bullets... the gangsta imagine isnt working for you sorry cat.. Not enough to really pull it off. But hey Jayz could either right?
Over all you need to work on your direction of your punchs.. making sure they go to dissing your opponent. Slowly work up strength through practice. After that work on your metaphors, and then after you have metaphors down try to get you wordplay and rhyme scheme up.. Accually rhyme scheme comes before metaphors. so yea...
That was trash god and ya style is shit,
u couldnt beat ManDibus if it was tatooed to ya dick//
basic and very much a played subject here...badly played.. but i guess its decent
my flows are ill, punchlines ridiculous,
I spit so sick niggaz like u catch syphillis//
again played. you really need some new content for you verse, sickness,cum lines, ish that you can think of in a minute is prolly play.. steer clear from it
lyically ,metaphorically you not ready,
cut u open like a blunt, disconnect you air tubes wit a machete//
accually ive heard blunt lines before,.. but there not THAT play.. this bar lacks strength though
ManDibus is nice, Punchline precise,
you claming u can eat me when u cant count barz right//
follow through is ok i guess.. but you need more strength in your bars yea mean? and your set could have been a lot better/
I spit nutrients to soul let it seap through,
your nowhere near me, 2/3 of ya wins were by dq//
eh alright punch i suppose.. but the set could have been more of a build up and the follow through could have had a better hit to it.
now do u really wanna battle,
I'll crack open ya adams apple and drink the juices like snapple//
this is an ok concept.. but i remember somthing like it from back in the day. haventheard much of it around here though so its ok. the punch isnt much though
looke i aint even comin at u 4real,
lyricall you'll get killed, none can compare to mandibus neva have and neva will.................//
self boasting, i can compair, you would get merked... this ending could have been alot better
over all you needed to workon your punchs strength. your metaphors were pretty much all play and needed to have some fresh ideas. rhyme scheme could be tweaked a little bit.
Vote -ManDIbus
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