no more than 20 lines
elli to spit first
no crew votes
good luck
elli'mist
Timeless
no more than 20 lines
elli to spit first
no crew votes
good luck
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-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Doper Than You-
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gimme an hour, i gotta go 2 class
college is killing me
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i smell fear, ok then.............................
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-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Doper Than You-
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1. first line, where 'Mist eats timeless heart for lunch
2. 2nd line's a confession... i've already typed to much
3. if ya smellin anything, then ya best to hold ya breath
4. cuz all i'm sniffin is the stench of timeless' death
5. with venomous flows 'Mist is destroying weak foes
6. ya weak shit holds less weight than anorexic hoes
7. an 8 and 0 record just proves one sad thing is true
8. seriously... u mean there's 8 ppl who are worse than you? (DAMN)
9. 'Mist work words to destroy these unheard disturbed herbs
10. timeless left spineless, 'Mist'll eat ya rhymes til ya mindless
11. after this round change ya status.... make it 'lifeless'
12. carrying a 12 gauge shotty, i'll bleed ya body, death is instant
13. cuz when i see timeless... it's his back... he's runnin in the distance
14. i'm hot and your not, my silence would hold more than your speech
15. and if ya feed off my lines it just goes to show that your weak
16. i'm a warlord chek the scoreboard, before i destroy this poor whore
*click click*
17. defeat is impossible lore, give ya blood cells tour of the hospital floor
18. acidic text wrecks ya neck, timeless verse to self implode
19. shoulda stopped at 16... you didnt deserve a reload...
ELLI'MIST
up up and away!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wat happened did timeless chicken out or something and by the wa elli that was a hot rhyme
heh..... not real sure where he went
he's probably gettin up w/ his ghostwriter
and just call me 'Mist
it works better
another newbie to kill and add to my eva growin time win list
ya didnt cum close to landin any punches, dawg ya r"elli-mist"
that line alone killed ya, coz i have a strong feeling ya bit
pritty sure its been used coz of lack of personals in the spit,
U alwayz pretendin to be someone else, fakin shit all ya life
your lyrics is Like trampz sellin crisps, no one bought ya bites
Fuck kid, u could start ya own crew by yaself wid all ya identities
ya the *thickest bitch on this sight, i aint talkin bout EYE DENSE ITY
u could be a *armless mid-wife* u still couldnt be "DROPPIN KIDS"
and unless your an *angry DJ * u aint ever gonna be "STOPPIN HITS"
I'm ruinin' ya evenin' for it to go bad, like it's a disaster-date.
dude Your sex life's a royal decoy, its nothin' but master-bait(masterbate)
i put all kinds of signs into my well designed REAL rhymes
ya game is fake as sylicon, just like your 20 somthing lines!!!
nuff sed, if ya dont understand the wordplay. please dont vote!!!
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-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Doper Than You-
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lack of personals?
dog
you're my first battle
i don't know shit bout you
OK heres how it is i dont even have vote here but im gnna...........
time u had this one rapped up with the 1st 4 lines u had better punches and a better structuer and took this in ever catigoir in my eyes...................
v/ timeless
Elli'mist.::. wow that was a siik drop man.
Timeless.::. samething to urs...
Breakdown...
Elli'mist.:dope opener that got me hooked,closer was good,flow was nice and smooth,You didnt have many personals though that let your verse down:.
Timeless.:dope opener like all of your battles,closer was aiight but could of been better,Flow was nice and smooth wasn't abit patchy,You had some very good punches which hit the target and impressed me:.
Vote.:Timeless:.
Great battle people iwould like to see a re-match in the future...
.:Itook the time to break yours down please return me the favour and be fair:.
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Structure: Tie
Flow:Tie
Multiez: None
Vocab: Time
VOTE~Time
^ ya need to give reasons otherwise they'll diqualify the vote. thanks tho....uppin
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-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Doper Than You-
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I liked both....
Elli mist, I liked your structure and you're description, your rhyming was ok. This was your first attempt, and It was very good. But my vote goes to Timeless because his song was more structured and his wordplay more complex.
Punches: Time, definitely hit harder, dropping kids line was alright.
Wordplay: Time, this is where you excelled, pretty dope wordplay.
Multis: Mist, had some decent multis throughout the verse, Time had some, but not as many
Personals: Time, had the really missed line, that line was kinda forced, but clever. Mist, you need to come up with something about his name, some sort of personal.
Opener: Time, the really missed line opener.
Closer: Time, had a weak meta, but still better than empowering himself. Close with a bang Mist.
Decent battle, keep the wordplay up Time. Keep elevating Mist. Also Time, finish with a bang, your finisher was pretty weak.
2nd line's a confession... i've already typed to much
I guess that's Mists best line, only praised himslef
ya the *thickest bitch on this sight, i aint talkin bout EYE DENSE ITY
u could be a *armless mid-wife* u still couldnt be "DROPPIN KIDS"
Pretty dop wordplay here, best lines
Return the favor in my sig, or the other re-opened battles (God Dammit!!!)
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
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