TheUnderRated vs. Rule (Topical)

[TheUnderRated]

20 lines.....
no/crew/dr/hate
topic: thoughtz of hatred....
checkin peace

[TheUnderRated]

you never checked in dawg its due by end of the day that was the deal get here or your Dq'ed can't give you any unfair advantages....

[TheUnderRated]

Topic : Thoughtz of Hate….

The SkinHead
Fuck these black bitches they’re what is wrong with our society..
Nothing but a drain on the economy and I won’t stand by idly…
I’m Glad we beat their ancestors lets go and hang em by there lips…
Cut up some sheets tonight were targeting both the bloods and the crips….

The Gangsta
Word I hear whiteys riding tonight dog make sure you come strapped..
Let em bring a rope we’ll take slugs and leave their necks snapped…
These racist motherfuckas been askin for it and I’m happy to serve…..
I’m riding shotty we shooting the KKK and puttin there jaws to the curbs….

The Terrorist
These American fucks they killed my people I want revenge…
I will poison their whole country there tap water my syringe…
Time to strap a bomb to my chest and confront the white devil..
Allah will surely grant us favor and with him we shall revel….

The Housewife
This neighborhoods so bad I’m sick of all the crime….
The Niggers and the KKK go at it all the time….
Then along comes Muhamed I can’t even understand his race…
Plz god watch over me and take me from this wretched place…


UNDERSTAND THE HATRED ABOVE IS VERY STEREOTYPICAL OF COURSE…
IN REAL LIFE FOR THESE FACTIONS AND PEOPLE THE HATRED IS MUCH WORSE….

[TheUnderRated]

aight fuckin A rule now you got me in a slang....I can't Dq you cause you never checked in and you agreed to the rules in a PM........YOUR late...thats a bitch move..pz

[rule]

I'm droppen now...something came up last night...so blah....here is a quick key...good luck an nice verse...stop cryin like a bitch...you already had 2 battles up...3 isn't allowed anyways...so why you cryin

Remarkable the sweet essance of a vibrant occasion
Thinkin to my self the amount of hate I endure is amazing
But i'm looking out my window before I go under covers
With tears pooring down my face from words of thunder
Saying I can't do this I can't do that it isn't amusing
So I close my eyes an vision something thats soothing
All because neglect is all I encounter for help
Discovered I don't wonna play the hand delt
For it's coming to armeggedon from emotional ties
People haten on me cause of there personal alias
They don't even consider trying to get to know me
Rather watch me come to school with slit wrists an disabilities
Why's a life so tragic when I came from a womb an blood
Then live to die in a casket and be sent to the heavens above
I've placed myself on the red line out of this place
All because all I ever felt from peers was thoughts of hate

[TheUnderRated]

aight lets upit for votes then................glad to see you could make it................................................ ....................

[rule]

uppen for votes
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[Freeman]

iight...

UnderRated...

Your verse was pretty decent... A wasnt so sure about the way you seperated the lines every so often... But a s'pose it didnt affect it that much... Jus a little...
You had good imagery... A nice flow... But...
You had very poor vocab... not many complex words... Made it seem basic if you get me... You sort of did 4 different sides of this topic... Which made it seem you didnt stay on one topic... You did four... Lol... Nice drops... Pz...

Rule...

This was a cool verse... Liked it man...
You had very complex vocabulary... Made the piece hotter by using that... Creative... You stayed on topic all the way through... Had a nice view of the topic you were given... Nice wordplay...
Cant find much to critisize... Which can only be a good thing?

Good verses by both... Jus feel that rule took this marginally...

v/ rule

Hit this up both of you... Thanks...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112267

Pz...

[rule]

Thanks for the vote...but your battles already over man....no need to check it out...but you had a nice verse for the win...

uppen

[rule]

....uppers....we want to get some votes...this has been up awhile

[Whitelightning]

Good Verses Both Of You.

TheUnderRated- I think you were trying to make up imagery with lengthed lines..It didn't work. I wasn't really feeling this...your POV's were interesting but it just didn't click. The components of a good topical just weren't there.

Rule- For keyed..this was really good. As a topical verse..I feel you had more elements and had some wicked imagery without even working to hard. You get my vote for a having a better verse. Good Job. Keep Droppin

Check out my sig for battles.

Vote- Rule.

[rule]

thanks...uppen for more votes...dont sleep

[e.coli]

nice battle

theunderrated-u had a decent verse...i wasnt really feelin your diffrent point of views but they were creative....u had some decent imagery but your vocab was simplistic...overall good verse 7/10

rule-u had a solid verse...it was real good considering it is a keystyle....your vocab was more complex than theunderrated's and u had some good imagery...that is why i think u take this battle

v/rule...nice battle

can u hit this honestly please
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112534

[Chris Black]

Underateds verse was ok. Seemes like you haven't been doing many topicals thought. Seems like you were just spreading yourself too thin. I like the concept of hate from many peopls different eyes. The concept allon was the best thing about the verse.

Rule, you came in like a topical vet. The wording was nice. The flow was nice. It just seemes like this verse had more thought put into it. I enjoyed reading this much more so you get my vote.

Vote rule

Pleeease return the favor:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113081

[rule]

^^your battles are all done..or else i would have...upppen for one more vote