You put the rules up in your check in
This is my check
JamesJr.
Brethren
You put the rules up in your check in
This is my check
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
- Brethren
Checking in ....
Verses Due by 12 am (midnight) Mon. Feb 2nd
Votes close feb 3 mid 12am
10 lines (minimum) -20 (max)
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SORRY I am new ,.....
no close date, this site gets mad slept on .
You want midnight tonight, or tomorrow?
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
- Brethren
At 1st I thought I was dealing with a Vet again
Until, I met this mother fucker Brethren
Like he's a member of an elite brotherhood
Lyrics killed him 6ft deep, just so his mother could
See em dead, done for good!
2nd he's 2 years under me, 2 years younger please
My lyrics are hollows then guns release
Feeding off dude's fear with a hunger to beef
He's done I put em under the street, in a slump slumbered to sleep
This youngster is WEAK!
His raps aren't raw he's just wishing it is
So go back to playing basketball in Michigan this is it
This bitch is thin.... and brittle
Bitch just quit you're insignificant and little
Now this is the riddle in the middle of the verse...
Caskets closed you'll get riddled in the church
And tell us how many times you're gonna get roasted
and come back in this place?
Burnt his ass is toasted... a direct smack in the face
James Jr.
Waiting on your verse...... 11:38 Eastern time
His BioConcieved in-1983-*Started smoking green at 13* (cigarettes as well) *Stealing expensive clothes at 14 Alcohol abuse*Arrested for Agg.B&E at 15 (Felony 2)-Grand Theft Auto-("I did my time, like a man and came out with a clear perspective&
You hard?! Fucking sun dials is the only way you did your time,lyrics, production, computers, (trees)
Watch this bitch fall apart, like I fucking slit your spine,
Ha, with that bio, I sense a fake ass Philly act,
Interested in trees, hell, I'm battlin a dendrophiliac,
JamesJr. PM's me, "can you beat me please", I accept with open arms,
Leave this battle like cigarettes, close but no cigar,
Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself,
Like this kid was battling himself in the mirror, you're losing yaself,
You asking to die battling me, just stick an axe in your thigh,
You ain't an ass-pirate, then why you got a patch in ya eye?,
You shut the fuck up now, only refer to me as father or pops,
Girls be like, get your pause off me, like pick ups were comma's or stops,
While you sweatin, anticipating, like you measurin water in drops,
Ohio?! Alien abducted ass live on a farm, why don't you just offer them crops?,
Challenge Brethren, Now you ripped, head shoulder knees and toes,
Need to grow after I killed you, fuck 20 lines, I don't even need em yo,
JamesJUNIOR, Dick so small, this idiot gets brain through thongs,
When he says Grand Theft Auto, he just means playing a video game too long.
Ouch
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
- Brethren
At 1st I thought I was dealing with a Vet again
Until, I met this mother fucker Brethren
Like he's a member of an elite brotherhood
Lyrics killed him 6ft deep, just so his mother could
weak punches and an attemp at a personal
See em dead, done for good!
2nd he's 2 years under me, 2 years younger please
My lyrics are hollows then guns release
Feeding off dude's fear with a hunger to beef
He's done I put em under the street, in a slump slumbered to sleep
This youngster is WEAK!
still no real punches
His raps aren't raw he's just wishing it is
So go back to playing basketball in Michigan this is it
This bitch is thin.... and brittle
Bitch just quit you're insignificant and little
first punch...but weak
Now this is the riddle in the middle of the verse...
Caskets closed you'll get riddled in the church
And tell us how many times you're gonna get roasted
and come back in this place?
Burnt his ass is toasted... a direct smack in the face
you verse contained no creativity, jus simplistic stuff. Check out the Whackness Emergency Center for helpful battle tips.
You hard?! Fucking sun dials is the only way you did your time,
Watch this bitch fall apart, like I fucking slit your spine,
ok personal, lil played
Ha, with that bio, I sense a fake ass Philly act,
Interested in trees, hell, I'm battlin a dendrophiliac,
nice..good vocab
JamesJr. PM's me, "can you beat me please", I accept with open arms,
Leave this battle like cigarettes, close but no cigar,
haha nice meta
Rearrange your name, and get a 'mesaj' about this kid bruising himself,
Like this kid was battling himself in the mirror, you're losing yaself,
ok
You asking to die battling me, just stick an axe in your thigh,
You ain't an ass-pirate, then why you got a patch in ya eye?,
um..kinda whack
You shut the fuck up now, only refer to me as father or pops,
Girls be like, get your pause off me, like pick ups were comma's or stops,
weak punch and meta
While you sweatin, anticipating, like you measurin water in drops,
Ohio?! Alien abducted ass live on a farm, why don't you just offer them crops?,
Challenge Brethren, Now you ripped, head shoulder knees and toes,
Need to grow after I killed you, fuck 20 lines, I don't even need em yo,
kinda filler
JamesJUNIOR, Dick so small, this idiot gets brain through thongs,
When he says Grand Theft Auto, he just means playing a video game too long.
played
Ouch
dope lol
OK, Brethren rippe JamesJr. He had a more elevated verse with good punches, personals, and metas. Some filler in there. Now to me James' verse was like a vets filler, weak punches and nothing to exciting.
For the love of God please drop an honest vote here! It's been open for ever. Mad sleepage. Thanks guys http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110540
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i'll do this one line by name
1st two lines
give to brethren. the whole sun dials and split spines was dope.
didn't like the open by james jr.
2nd two lines
brethren. i hope that dendrophiliac was someone scared of trees. if so give it to him. for this word usage alone. its like a big word score in scrabble.
3rd bar
goes to james jr. had to cut it off with the younger please/gun release. even though this wasn't great it was better than brethrens cause his didn't rhyme.
this gone take a while so i'll skip to close calls
4th bar
the best two bars so far
brethren did a great job with the rearrange name bruising himself. in a mirror fighting, he losing himself. loved that. very original. jamesjr. did a great one as well with the hunger to beef. slump slumbered to sleep. this kid is weak. but brethren gets this one.
5th
goes to brethren cause james jr repeated it is on both lines
after that brethrenjust went on with punches and personals and vocab. goes to brethren
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111506
do a nigg a favor and vote on this battle thanx to all who vote
yo that was an aight battle but can any
of yall hook a brotha up wit some votes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111515
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111495
hit up this spot and return the favor and vote. aight
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111488
I'll return votes later, uppin #1 .
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
- Brethren
battle was 1 sided......battle was weak...but brethren clearly took this 1.....1st cat seemed 2 elementary in yes rhyme......other punches werent hot........but the use of his wordplay outshined the first dude...........an iight battle
vote = brethren
hit this battle up
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110017
Ok Can we get some "real" votes now
I enjoy criticism, but not one sided bias criticism.
It was a good battle, My vote goes to James cuz he had some good punchlines going with a nice flow, nothin outstandin but he gets my vote
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