Okay, 10-12 lines, no bullshit, and let's make it blind drop, sound good?
Okay, 10-12 lines, no bullshit, and let's make it blind drop, sound good?
Okay, Let's drop by 12 eastern.
Check in...............................
Shit, sorry, I was trying to say 12 pacific time, that's like 3 eastern time..
I just put this together while I was tryin to figure out what was wrong, hope you drop soon..Sorry for all the mix up..
KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO..
I don't know this kid, but I know he's new..
Easly explained, from day one it was threw..
Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow..
Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow..
Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast..
Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past..
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle..
The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile..
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint.
You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews
while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news.
Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused;
I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too.
If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears;
They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years.
Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse
I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst.
Sorry it took me so long. Damn, nice verse. Good luck.
You too, yeah, I had problems with my comp. Anyway, nice verse, I guess mine was okay for a first battle.
I think KLO took this one, i just thought he flowed better and had nice punches, I really like the line about the shopping list
peace
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Uppit #2 Come on people vote, I'd vote on others if I had the posts....
Uppit #3 vote damn you..............................................
Uppit #4 all I'm askin is for people to vote, I'd vote on others battles if I had 100 posts but I don't, so vote on my battle, and when I do have 100 posts I'll start voting on yours...................
Uppit #5 People need to vote on this now, this is the last up I can do, so for the love of god vote on this newbies need to get votes also....................................
I have to give this on to VanIlla for verser structure and delivery. KLO some of the shit you said could have been tight if you worked on the delivery.
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KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO..
^opened it decent, with an ok personal
I don't know this kid, but I know he's new..
Easly explained, from day one it was threw..
^thought this could have hit harder, quite basic
Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow..
Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow..
^ok W/P, but didnt hit too hard
Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast..
Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past..
^OK W/P again,, but ya need to work on punching
Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad..
Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad..
^quite wit'y... decent wordplay, n hit ok.... but for a closer wasnt that strong.....
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint.
^nice flow... hit ok... but openers need to be better
You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews
while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news.
^dont like self props in battle... and it didnt hit
Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused;
I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too.
^funny... but weak for a dis
If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears;
They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years.
^again quite wit'y, but didnt rhyme very well
Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse
I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst.
^weak punch... decent flow tho
You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle..
The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile..
^weak for a closer... you need to work on punches
all in all thought this was pretty close, but im giving it to vanilla, one or 2 personals with heavier punches... KLO, yours were too soft... vote=van
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