10 lines
u spit first
2 day time limit
Vendetta
general
10 lines
u spit first
2 day time limit
i am catergorized in "illness" and your in the General Topic "lyrical disasters"...
your general stats should be 0-100, not even close to me and "Lyrical Masters"...
your fate is waiting.. im headlockin you lyrically into a deep-sleep coma...
your 1st or second battle but ima kill you and end your short lasting saga...
drop to your knees if u wish to be part of excistance of this site after this battle...
run for your life, hop on your donkey and get on outta town, hitch up the saddle...
the chances are of you winnin, u choosin heads and u flip a two-headed coin...
ill slice you up, make you able to see ur guts and intestence, chopin 'way at ya groin...
break your bones in half, raps or bones wont grow back, ur startin 2 malfunction...
he looked malfunction up in the dictionary and said, my raps are startin 2 dicfunction!..
im like an airplane except when I "land" a punch your eyes-pop instead of your ears/
suddenly you fall to the ground people crowd around your eyes are re(a)d with tears/
battling noobs cause your greedy until you lose cause you know, you’ll never beat-me/
could never defeat me being my personal butcher is the only way you would “meet me”/(meet or meat)
only way you could put me in a coma is with a decent auroma but since you stink that’s not gonna happen/
keep it to your self hang your career up on a shelf don’t you notice noones clappin you need to quit rappin/
im gonna rip-you like a wet tissue and both of us know that noone will miss-you cause your wack/
there’s no returning, cause your not worth burning take out a pen and start learning cause you cant come back/
so what’s the difference, all your punches are misses like a blind couple trying to give each other kisses/
so this is where it ends, get a date that has no friends, you might even get married and become a mrs./(I know you’re a boy but im saying that your gay...)
i had a lot to do so i just got to it i got bored at the end lol...upin
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i think gen came a little harder wit the punches, structure, vocab, n flow, Ven was nice though, wit metas, personals, some punches.
breakdown
punches: gen
metas: ven
flow: gen
personals: ven
structure: gen
vocab: gen
OVERALL: General I vote General, keep elevatin vendetta.
Ja'e Roc Entertainment 2004
punches: gen
metas: ven
flow: gen
personals: ven
structure: gen
vocab: gen
My vote goes to General. Vendetta, you were just missing punches, you used a lot of filler.
could never defeat me being my personal butcher is the only way you would “meet me
Best line
Also General, you forced a lot of wordplays, try to be more smooth
Look at em cheer - the crowd, I've been tame as I spit it to you
Everything from here till now has been strained and then given to you
- Brethren
ight...
1st up...
Vendetta -
i am catergorized in "illness" and your in the General Topic "lyrical disasters"...
your general stats should be 0-100, not even close to me and "Lyrical Masters"...
^ tha 1st line wuz nice, 2nd line wuz ehh
your fate is waiting.. im headlockin you lyrically into a deep-sleep coma...
your 1st or second battle but ima kill you and end your short lasting saga...
^ ehh, nuthin special here
drop to your knees if u wish to be part of excistance of this site after this battle...
run for your life, hop on your donkey and get on outta town, hitch up the saddle...
^ again, nuthin special
the chances are of you winnin, u choosin heads and u flip a two-headed coin...
ill slice you up, make you able to see ur guts and intestence, chopin 'way at ya groin...
^ tha 1st line could have been hott if you werded it right lol. it had potential, second line wuz nuthin
break your bones in half, raps or bones wont grow back, ur startin 2 malfunction...
he looked malfunction up in the dictionary and said, my raps are startin 2 dicfunction!..
^ nuthin special...
ok, overall i give this a 3/10... very weak verse. expected much more.
next up...
General -
im like an airplane except when I "land" a punch your eyes-pop instead of your ears/
suddenly you fall to the ground people crowd around your eyes are re(a)d with tears/
^ NICE! i like tha way you used tha land and read.... good punch
battling noobs cause your greedy until you lose cause you know, you’ll never beat-me/
could never defeat me being my personal butcher is the only way you would “meet me”/(meet or meat)
^ lol.. nice line, i like how you can use both werds. also a nice punch
only way you could put me in a coma is with a decent auroma but since you stink that’s not gonna happen/
keep it to your self hang your career up on a shelf don’t you notice noones clappin you need to quit rappin/
^ lol.. 1st line wuz weak but funny as hell! lol... 2nd line wuz pretty weak too.
im gonna rip-you like a wet tissue and both of us know that noone will miss-you cause your wack/
there’s no returning, cause your not worth burning take out a pen and start learning cause you cant come back/
^ this is ehh, i like um, but they nuthin special
so what’s the difference, all your punches are misses like a blind couple trying to give each other kisses/
so this is where it ends, get a date that has no friends, you might even get married and become a mrs./(I know you’re a boy but im saying that your gay...)
^ LMFAO!!! tight finisher!
overall - 6.5/10
My Vote - General..
Vendetta - you had NO punches homie. just weak attempts with potential. Elevate alil more. You will get better once you learn to make better punches.
return tha favor vendetta... general already voted... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106743
PEACE!!!
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Breakdown:
punches - gen
personals - gen
flow - tie
creativity - gen
opener - gen
closer - gen
OVERALL - gen......but try not to stretch your lines so far
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...The Rhymes
gen u had better shyt.i can understand y sum of ur words didnt flow as well as u wanted them cuz ur not on mic.....good battle
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mah vote goez 2 general.......he had smooth punches......nice flow.......but madd long.....lol
vendetta- even tho im in ya crew......i g2 drop an honest vote....general took dis wit betta punches n flow
punches: g
flow: g
structure:......??????
personalz: general
dese r da most important.....so general takes it
hit dis battl up
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