random rambling

[Qui-Gon Illy]

Were livin in the imagaination, lives filled with aggrivation
kids have no motivation, live lives filled with masturbation
im awaiting conformation, or confirming that im waiting
"way to state the obvious", the unseen world is what im stating
you know youre all relating, the bosses daughter is who your dating
i try to give you criticism, and you all think that im hating
look at the world around you, make it a priority
immigrants sneak over the border, now whos the minority?
ya'll act like a sorority, beating eachother with paddles
riding every underground artist's dicks, like they wear a saddle
go copy another style, dont even think of makin your own
and then open your mouth up wide, like you was in Home Alone

[Qui-Gon Illy]

up uppity up up up

[bribeone]

nice ..it indeed was what the title promised.
but It was like a short spurt of abunch of thought that
seemed to be cluttered in your head and layed out well
with structure, internal rhyming and good detail
nice short read man..props ..


now go check out my open mic..It's short and sweet too

[young mike]

that shit was mad nice i was feeling that shit keep it up

[Split]

if i could figure out how to quote with the new rb setup, i would quote k.largo's feedback, seeing as how it was exactly what i was thinking.

This piece seemed just like a vent session lol, getting some shit off your chest.
nice meta's for sure, decent vocab, impeccable flow.

if you could return the favor on my piece "hell", i would appreciate it