Island vs Mystery~murdera... Oooo boy..!

[Allen McGregor]

20 lines max...


due... by... Thurs let's say..?



a merk n' merk production people... let's make it good...

[Mystery~Murdera]

lol, cool, in..............
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[Allen McGregor]

Fuck bringin head... this kid ain even spittin warm.,
Mystery, ~, murdera, wackness in 3 different forms...
I've got this easy... Av don't have to diss you good,
my '...' make more sence than your existence could...
you write 'lethal scripturez'... an Island'll back it up,
Cause that's a RB crew... n' you're all wack as fuck...
he hopes I just no show... but Island'll post n' spit,
watch me put the odds against you.. two four n' six...
and I know how you drop... never prone to go first,
drop off ya week written, as ya newest promo verse...
he's quick to brag, you never battled, quit the frontin,
my skill sits besides yours... literally it's next to nothing...
and i heard you fell off... droppin whackness to test,
so turn n' face away from me... now ya back to ya best...
I'll snipe ya... Island'll find ya chick n' spoil her soon,
only time ya steamin ahead is givin it in the boiler room...
ya point to enter this battle... is fuckin killin me duke,
the point of no return isn't where ya from, it's where we wished you return to and possibly die because of the lies you told about the way you flowed and we all saw that you couldn't go on with lines that stretched as bad as this closer dude...






and I'm out...

[Mystery~Murdera]

...I'll post first thing tomorrow, gotta work,
and do some work for school. Nice drop....
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[Mystery~Murdera]

dont get it? dont vote...elite only <-- edited in



I know you used to bite, but lately its all worse…
Cuz I X-ray’d Av’s Abs… to read Evolve’s verse!!
Its flowin - u dissolve first, and I wanted to mention…
Av led Merk Squad but had to battle 13th 13 times…
…………………………….just to get the admission!!
Witness kid, listen – don’t gotta be Too legit, to Nail Ya
Cuz if Island’s Hawaii …shit, then I’m fuckin Australia!!
But I’ll tell ya, Av doesn’t come to this sport to bite…
He just REALLY steps to the plate… and brings fork n knife!
Ya know I’m Right… a win? U cant even envision this…
Even after Chrit merked u in text… u claimed u invented it!!
This hypocritic kid! - I fit this dick right into this slut…
Rumor is u fell off… what I don’t get… is of what?!
Nuthin but dust, Island, Av, Mr. E - ur not hardly dope
N it must be hard to cope that when Chyna left…….
……………………it Wasn’t Just ur heart that broke!!
And The pieces are showin, guess u aint able to Hold’em…
But that’s what u get for losin ur virginity over a Cable Modem!
M Squads A Joke now, Ur Old n U knew U Werent Winnin
Avs not a bitch…? Shit Even Avalon is a book about women!
I guess ur pretendin the Doc didn’t get it right at Birth…

And Fuck An Island!! U make me look like the whole goddamn Earth!!!!


votes

[Evolve]

Fuck bringin head... this kid ain even spittin warm.,
Mystery, ~, murdera, wackness in 3 different forms...
decent.. a little humorous

I've got this easy... Av don't have to diss you good,
my '...' make more sence than your existence could...
again.. decent.. nothing to complicated

you write 'lethal scripturez'... an Island'll back it up,
Cause that's a RB crew... n' you're all wack as fuck...
ehh... could've been worded better

he hopes I just no show... but Island'll post n' spit,
watch me put the odds against you.. two four n' six...
not bad... witty

and I know how you drop... never prone to go first,
drop off ya week written, as ya newest promo verse...
didnt like this too much

he's quick to brag, you never battled, quit the frontin,
my skill sits besides yours... literally it's next to nothing...
old concept but pretty nice none the less

and i heard you fell off... droppin whackness to test,
so turn n' face away from me... now ya back to ya best...
i liked this for some reason.. nice

I'll snipe ya... Island'll find ya chick n' spoil her soon,
only time ya steamin ahead is givin it in the boiler room...
LOL.. nice

ya point to enter this battle... is fuckin killin me duke,
the point of no return isn't where ya from, it's where we wished you return to and possibly die because of the lies you told about the way you flowed and we all saw that you couldn't go on with lines that stretched as bad as this closer dude...
i got your point on this... not bad

MM

I know you used to bite, but lately its all worse…
Cuz I X-ray’d Av’s Abs… to read Evolve’s verse!!
Lol.. nice.. plus you used my name

Its flowin - u dissolve first, and I wanted to mention…
Av led Merk Squad but had to battle 13th 13 times…
…………………………….just to get the admission!!
nice personal... but was a little off w/ the sylable count

Witness kid, listen – don’t gotta be Too legit, to Nail Ya
Cuz if Island’s Hawaii …shit, then I’m fuckin Australia!!
good play on his name... not bad

But I’ll tell ya, Av doesn’t come to this sport to bite…
He just REALLY steps to the plate… and brings fork n knife!
this made me laugh.. good

Ya know I’m Right… a win? U cant even envision this…
Even after Chrit merked u in text… u claimed u invented it!!
ehh.. not so good

This hypocritic kid! - I fit this dick right into this slut…
Rumor is u fell off… what I don’t get… is of what?!
ok.. but wording could have been a little better

Nuthin but dust, Island, Av, Mr. E - ur not hardly dope
N it must be hard to cope that when Chyna left…….
……………………it Wasn’t Just ur heart that broke!!
again, nice personal.. but the sylables are a little off

And The pieces are showin, guess u aint able to Hold’em…
But that’s what u get for losin ur virginity over a Cable Modem!
nice.. i liked this

M Squads A Joke now, Ur Old n U knew U Werent Winnin
Avs not a bitch…? Shit Even Avalon is a book about women!
lol.. its true

I guess ur pretendin the Doc didn’t get it right at Birth…

And Fuck An Island!! U make me look like the whole goddamn Earth!!!!
decent closer

Well, all in all this was a pretty nice battle ... both had some pretty good
punches, some personals... BUT

i got to go with MM on this.. he seemed a little more on point with his
verse... Av, i still love you...

Vote MM

[Taktik]

This was a dope battle.....both came with some real hard punches...some nice personals........but i have to go with M~M, he had some better concepts....island you had a few played punches i wasnt feelin....and you werent as consistent as MM was....

it was close....

V/ MM

[Allen McGregor]

Nice verse... I don't think you tried...

[Mystery~Murdera]

honestly? ...maybe a little bit... just enough to win...

[Born To Kill]

Damn dope battle, guys...

Av certainly didn't come with the fire he had in battle with me.

I thought this was way less personal and way less "ouch".

Thanks alot for saving all that shit for me!

MM took this with better personals, alot more quotable lines, and some funny/hard punches...

The "knife/fork" line was pretty priceless...

Overall, just more muscle from MM.

Good job on both sides, though...

Peace

[bribeone]

and My honest breakdown..-

Island-

Fuck bringin head... this kid ain even spittin warm.,
Mystery, ~, murdera, wackness in 3 different forms...
quick short witty, liked

I've got this easy... Av don't have to diss you good,
my '...' make more sence than your existence could...
lol good

you write 'lethal scripturez'... an Island'll back it up,
Cause that's a RB crew... n' you're all wack as fuck...
ok

he hopes I just no show... but Island'll post n' spit,
watch me put the odds against you.. two four n' six...
Unique nice

and I know how you drop... never prone to go first,
drop off ya week written, as ya newest promo verse...
at times true lol...nice

he's quick to brag, you never battled, quit the frontin,
my skill sits besides yours... literally it's next to nothing...
lol nice

and i heard you fell off... droppin whackness to test,
so turn n' face away from me... now ya back to ya best...
lol nice again..Wordplay

I'll snipe ya... Island'll find ya chick n' spoil her soon,
only time ya steamin ahead is givin it in the boiler room...
lol

ya point to enter this battle... is fuckin killin me duke,
the point of no return isn't where ya from, it's where we wished you return to and possibly die because of the lies you told about the way you flowed and we all saw that you couldn't go on with lines that stretched as bad as this closer dude...
DOpe


M~M-

I know you used to bite, but lately its all worse…
Cuz I X-ray’d Av’s Abs… to read Evolve’s verse!!
Lmao Dope

Its flowin - u dissolve first, and I wanted to mention…
Av led Merk Squad but had to battle 13th 13 times…
…………………………….just to get the admission!!
ok wasnt liking too much

Witness kid, listen – don’t gotta be Too legit, to Nail Ya
Cuz if Island’s Hawaii …shit, then I’m fuckin Australia!!
Play off name nice

But I’ll tell ya, Av doesn’t come to this sport to bite…
He just REALLY steps to the plate… and brings fork n knife!
Once again the bite reference..nice

Ya know I’m Right… a win? U cant even envision this…
Even after Chrit merked u in text… u claimed u invented it!!
I get it another bite reference so,so

This hypocritic kid! - I fit this dick right into this slut…
Rumor is u fell off… what I don’t get… is of what?!
OK.

Nuthin but dust, Island, Av, Mr. E - ur not hardly dope
N it must be hard to cope that when Chyna left…….
……………………it Wasn’t Just ur heart that broke!!
nice personal didnt feel the effect though

And The pieces are showin, guess u aint able to Hold’em…
But that’s what u get for losin ur virginity over a Cable Modem!
nice

M Squads A Joke now, Ur Old n U knew U Werent Winnin
Avs not a bitch…? Shit Even Avalon is a book about women!
Dope line

I guess ur pretendin the Doc didn’t get it right at Birth…

And Fuck An Island!! U make me look like the whole goddamn Earth!!!!

ok ...so,so closer went back at the name


ok after closely reading this it was a very good battle from both
but I have to go with Isalnd on just consistency. M~M did have
a couple of standout lines but then also had some clunkers
which just threw me off, and then finished strong until the ok finisher.

vote/Island

[Dadi Kewl]

Av had a nice verse...but MM just hit harder,
better punches and concepts got this for mystery

Best Lines:'I know you used to bite, but lately its all worse…
Cuz I X-ray’d Av’s Abs… to read Evolve’s verse!!'

M Squads A Joke now, Ur Old n U knew U Werent Winnin
Avs not a bitch…? Shit Even Avalon is a book about women!

and i heard you fell off... droppin whackness to test,
so turn n' face away from me... now ya back to ya best...

V/ MM

[Mystery~Murdera]

4-1

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[Allen McGregor]

I love you...

[Richard Parker]

Island: I enjoyed your verse a lot. usually i try to give much more negative feedback than positive, just to elevate the writer, but its going to be hard here. Very good spit.
I have a little bit of a different perspective about witty lines though.. most people seem to think they are funny but not hard hitting, i think that the whole point of the wittiness is to get a point across, and therefore they are hard hitting .. when worded right. it seems that you have accomplished this somewhat in your verse. take the first line for example: Fuck bringin head... this kid ain even spittin warm.,
Mystery, ~, murdera, wackness in 3 different forms. i think that this line was witty, humorous, and hard hitting. because - you could have just as easily had a funny line, which did not involve him so much... and it would not have been as hard hitting. but the fact that, you used his name, and broke it down in a funny way, made it that much better. I liked your style this time for the most part..short and sweet, not short and crappy. Some problems with your verse: the closer was definitely a problem, i could not even figure out how it rhymed.. i know you did it on purpose but it still hurt your verse. Some of your lines werent as witty of were played & should have been taken out and replaced. like the next to nothing line. but its all good.

Mystery~Murdera: a decent verse. nothing really spectacular here.
problems: i dont like ur structure anymore. it seems in some parts like its not needed. you should look at them and see if they really were necessary to be there. Your punches were a little lacking i thought. a lot of the personals could have been turned into witty phrases or punchlines to make them stand out & hit harder. you seemed to just state the facts in some places, like right here:

Its flowin - u dissolve first, and I wanted to mention…
Av led Merk Squad but had to battle 13th 13 times…
…………………………….just to get the admission!!

try to make those things into a punch and they are much better to read & laugh at the one aimed at, or say "damn, that was ill."

Thats all i will say this time. PLEASE READ THE EXPLANATION. i didnt bullshit it like most voters probably do, just to get the line limit... i gave legit feedback and hope that it will be followed, otherwise theres no point to feedback...

VPTE - ISLAND