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DEF-STAR
Telekinetic
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1/ MAN THIS DUDE SOUND REAL PATHETIC/
2/ TRYIN TA SCRAMBLE A DOWN PAYMENT SO YOU CAN BUILD YOUR CREDIT/
3/ SO IF YOU AINT GOT SKILLS THEN DEADIT/
4/ TEST THE KID WHEN HE SPIT GARANTED THAT YOU WILL REGRET IT/
5/ WHEN I SPLATER BRAIN AND REALY MAKE YOU TELEKINETIC/
6/ BUT ITS ALL GOOD ILL SEE WHAT YOUR REALY ABOUT/
7/ WHEN I LEAVE A HOLE IN YOUR CHEST THE SIZE OF YOUR MOUTH/
8/ COME ON DOG YOU CLAME THAT YOU SPITTIN SOME HEAT/
9/ BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET/
10/ ITS DEF-STAR AND I DIDNT MEAN TA KILL YA LIKE THAT/
11/ BUT IT ONLY TOOK 11 BARS SO I GUESS YOU CAN CALL IT A RAP
YOUNG N RESTLESS
You can't escape my lyrical state of mind got no time to debate
Like a model lookin at her chest you wont confess that you fake
Im straight ill to the core you get knocked to the floor when I drop
You got somthin missin in ya dissin like a doughnut without a cop
You need to stop writin, every verse is a curse to any an all authentic
Jus ten minutes of my time drunk would send this chump to the clinic
I took a minute to look at ya report it seems your sort of into the three G's
Your nineteen an a hustler "wanabe" to me you just a weak ass buster in 3D
I know ya gonna wanna mimic what I spoke cause well your a joke
You could be up in the joint with me, but still not ever seein a toke
THATS WHATS UP NIGGA COME HARD ITS AIGHT BUT WE KNOW WHOS THE VICTOR. COME ON PEOPLE START VOTIN............................................. .................................................
YOUNG N RESTLESS
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YOUNG N RESTLESS
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Ill go ahead and leave something...
First off, you both are newby' s and it shows...need to elivate the vocab, on bothsides...
heres the breakdown individually..
Telekinetic, you need to upgrade your structure, your flows choppy, kinda hard to understand, like once verse goes really short and quick to rhyme then you rhym two words then try to rerhyme the quickly rhymed verse...too choppy for this site, good for toe -2- toe with a mic...
DEF-STAR-
you need to one up the punches, the ill kill you here and clap that don't mean shit, you gotta make the opponente feel belittled by something you see or sence, you cant be like "8/ COME ON DOG YOU CLAME THAT YOU SPITTIN SOME HEAT/
9/ BUT THE ONLY HIP HOP YOU DOIN IS WHEN I CLAP AT YOUR FEET/"(that a weak blow...need to elivate).....
VOTING TIME:
my vote goes to Def-Star, his structure was better, vocab was just as limited... but the blows were more crisp...this line did it for me....(WHEN I SPLATER BRAIN AND REALY MAKE YOU TELEKINETIC)
My vote goes to DEF-STAR cuz he came harder wit his rhymes............................................ .............
Do you people even understand my punches? Try readin my shit twice.................................................. ...............................
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Originally posted by: Unknown Skillz
My vote goes to DEF-STAR cuz he came harder wit his rhymes............................................ .............
The array of words u used already state the obvious.
You're a newb, & cleary didnt comprehend any if nothing of Tele's verse.
Telekinetic..took every catagory in my view..
The way i see it he generated a much better battle verse..
Some witty, creative punches.. i can't quote..
But there are some quotables in there.. nice work.
Skillz, just came to plain to win this..
For me there's no question..Telekinetic took this.
vote: Telekinetic
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thanks for the vote ace im glad sombody is seein my punches
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yo this battle was pretty one sided man
flow- telekenetik
metas- telekenetik
impact of disses- telekenetik
Overall verse- telekenetik
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