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    Lee Harvey

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    First verse of a new thing i'm workin' on. Wanted to see if you guys thought it was worth finishing.



    i remember the attack of establishment upon reflection
    the wrath of the fascist joint chiefs of staff infection
    reflections of the way life used to be like China Beach
    amphetamine and acetylene released defile the streets
    reciting silent sonnets for rocket silos gone atomic
    swore allegiance to the sword a month before we fell upon it
    the capitalist version of catalysts verses propaganda
    apocalyptic miasma for the masses covert memoranda
    a requiem for fallin stars with scars below the waistband
    invisible tribes with knives for eyes control the wasteland
    summer seeds of fire return to burn the winter harvest
    adam’s descendents feign repentance then invade the garden


    make a patsy take him out
    Camelot is burning down
    no one knows just who they are
    phantoms throw a coup-de-tat


    theoretical conspiracies political mysteries & scandals
    divinity said stick your enemies head on the mantle
    therapeutic candles mask the corpse redolences in Dallas
    rifle media reports scandals while usurper's take the palace
    thru the looking glasses Alice a generation etched in acid
    third eyes pride open wide spy the procession of his casket
    traffic signals for blasted missiles better safe than sorry
    cataclysms become romaticisms like the dance of Mata Hari
    so you decorate the coffin paint the walls in fallout shelters
    you say you want a revolution yet you pray for helter skelter
    cerebral matter still stains the back of Jackie's pink jacket
    a tragic example of power's plan to seek peace and attack it

    make a patsy take him out
    Camelot is burning down
    no one knows just who they are
    phantoms throw a coup-de-tat

    there's a heaven for seeds where the abdomen bleeds
    fuckers battle for feed and death shakes her rattle for these
    satyrical themes of world piece of mind your manners please
    and thank you for the draft cuz I can't imagine lives mattering
    How bout a deep thought we can sleep soft with old Lee caught
    now he be gone Jack Ruby got a sweet spot in the parking lot
    mystery solved case shut justice serviced served its purpose
    the master of rings spills the nitroglycerine to burn the circus
    we clowns suffer depression purge the nation with hysterics
    on the interior we cryin' a river external we grin and bear it
    smiles superimposed holding our weapon in the photograph
    40 years and still we fear the passing of assassin's aftermath


    You might not get the flow but it works out when spoken. So i'd rather comments on the wordplay and the content than structure, but whatever you wanna say is fine.

    Edited: FInished it.
    Last edited by debaser; December 25th, 2003 at 04:30 AM

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    Very nice use of high level vocabulary in ur verse, so im guessing its for a more mature audience. But it really does work with it tho, sum truly deep stuff that you do mention in you verse. The kinda thing that you can just listen to and it helps you reflect on the things in your life...well thats atleast how I felt.

    Good verse overall, looking forward to seeing the rest.
    Later, vote t-west.

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    dope scheme, props
    word theory... think about it...

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    verse if finished. give feed please.

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    Nice vocab,flow n some wordplay
    Hella lot of talent displayed
    dope...

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    anyone else ?

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    ...Excellent Shit Here, The Content Was A Breath Of Fresh Air, The Vocab Used Was Immaculate, The Visual Picture In The Second Verse Was Clear...

    ...Favorite Line...
    ..."cerebral matter still stains the back of Jackie's pink jacket"...

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    uppin .

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