World without reason

[snakeyes]

ten till midnight i stay up to da morning light/
extrodinare precission, i'm in love with the mic/
i lay any m.c down to sleep with bed time story, tuct in tight/
i be stallone, cliffhangin my way to enormous heights/
reality bites as anotha life dies in the worlds eyes/
no one feels the true grips of death as it changes tides/
no free rides to the next oasis, photosynthesis is da basis/
of this rotten existance as we face it on day by day, cant erase it/
cases of major porportions come washed away by da ocean/
love aint an emotion, its just anotha potion, spreadin erotion/
little by little we cease to exist in this planet takes it motion/
round a revolution dat cant be stopped, keep on pushin/
to the next level, soft like cushion we meddle da intrusion/
why do we keep on loosing grip of this time so confusing/
cant let it glide like a you be cruisin on a sunny day so amusin/
its a world full of sad faces that cant find reason/
so i end the flow teasin and skippin to da last season/
so cold in this winter cant find the child in me dat has been missn/

[Endeva.]

you need to leave three links........liked the opener....flow was ok for the most.....the topic was a bit choppy....drifted off in places.....but it was ok...nuthin special...but...yeah.....pZ

[Doctor Ill]

Ok nice complexity an' vocab but ya need to clean it up a bit remove the rough edges some of it sounded forced:

no free rides to the next oasis, photosynthesis is da basis/
of this rotten existance as we face it on day by day, cant erase it

That's an example of a bar it would have been better without

Flow was fine multis were lackin' as was an' overall focus but it was aight keep elevatin'

[NePtUnE]

It was aight. It wasn't the best shit, but it had some nice vocab. You need to spend more time on it and even it out a little bit.

[Mistral]

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.