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Thread: RSTL Verse For The Picture Week

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    RSTL Verse For The Picture Week




    Born unable to speak, he put his Heart Into Sketches
    No vocal Pallette, and so he'd use his Artists Perspective
    to Chart his Aggresion .. a Means to Release His Anger
    Yet His Final Portrait left critics at some what of a Cliff Hanger
    The meaning placed behind it was never Revealed or Seen
    so this is my interpertation on what this picture Means to Me
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    His inner Child walks the Stomach's Lining Afraid and Hopeless
    Silently Sweeping his Secrets Beneath a Wave of Emotions
    Attempting to Stay Focused as the pressure's Teathing his Mind
    and Crashing Lightning interrupted the Cleavage Of The Skies
    the Heathen's Opened Wide .. he Breathed a Sigh of Disbelief
    As he Doubled Back, Awestruck at the Sight He'd Seen
    the Lightning Ceased at that moment, something was Reaching Out
    Suddenly two Glaring Eyes had appeared Beneath the Clouds
    Piercing Down on the Youth, it's mouth Opened to say Something
    He realised it was His Conscience speaking to him From With In
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    "Listen to what i tell you, as i won't Say This Twice
    These portrait's were All Leading Up to you Paying The Price
    and Taking Your Life inevitably, as Depicted In This Painting
    With your Back To The World and the Distance Fading
    Plus you feel Caved In .. shown by Your Hostile Surroundings
    The Low Sky, Closing Ocean and Colossal Mountains.
    but you've Lost It Now & there's Tears on Saddened Faces
    As your Work's Admirers see your Death as a Talent Wasted
    It seems Faced With constant critics, & a Deficiancy of Speech
    Led you into a Bout with Depression, leaving you Mentally Weak
    the Abstract Scenes you depicted were actually Due To Ya Madness
    This wasn't a Brush with Death, it was Suicide On The Canvas"


    Peace.

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    Last edited by Maven.; December 18th, 2003 at 08:40 AM

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    Hmm...pretty dope.
    I see that you are taking a new poetic side of writing and it is evident, It was a little simple, but it implied great thinking into it.
    A pretty dope piece I must say. I especially loved how you closed the piece...it leaves you on a note to think about this. Nice piece.
    Hence Forward.. BURR!
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    word to my one dope fucking reply

    rapbattles stays ill w. the responses, yo

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    I like this style of writing. It made more sense to me than the other shit I read.

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    why du post battles and open mics from other sites???
    it was a nice piece but why?????
    the strcture is wot got me coz it built nicely
    w/ the flow thru the piece..
    and you had good vocab that strung the verse
    in a strong way....

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    I wont lie to you, if i write ANYTHING here, the same regular shit stabbers will hate on it and post a reply saying it's shit out of spite. Secondly, i do nothing for this site now. Havent for month's and don't intend to any time soon. Im here till i get 6K then im giving the name to either Potent or G.Hod and they can do what the fuck they like with it.



    Roll on 6k ..

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    ...I like your style..it has deep meaning to it...I think you are an excellent writer...I guess to get postive feed back you must start killing niggas in your rhyme...LOL!!!!!!!!1

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    ^ Consider ive been here since late 00 .. almost four years .. you don't think ive already done that? Battlings boring to me. Nothing but the same concepts flipped over and over again .. it's old.

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    this shit's on 99.9% of the crap posted in here right now - dont fucking sleep

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    dope.

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    Real nice, Cam...

    I didn't get near the same interpretation as you did from that...

    But not everyone is suppossed to see things the same.

    Nice piece, only slightly simple with your vocab.
    Good structure and flow.
    Great imagery.
    Meaning was kinda blah, but only cuz I disagree.

    I don't see it as his conscience in the pic...
    I see it as "God" taking notice that you are shortcutting through life.
    Perhaps judging.

    Maybe there's a slight similarity.

    But I didn't see death anywhere.

    Just a Big Brother type of thing.

    7.50/10

    Peace...

    And peep Asylum if you get the chance!

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    I agree with everyone else..it was simply 'DOPE'.. enough said..

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    Originally posted by Born To Kill
    Real nice, Cam...

    I didn't get near the same interpretation as you did from that...

    But not everyone is suppossed to see things the same.

    Nice piece, only slightly simple with your vocab.
    Good structure and flow.
    Great imagery.
    Meaning was kinda blah, but only cuz I disagree.

    I don't see it as his conscience in the pic...
    I see it as "God" taking notice that you are shortcutting through life.
    Perhaps judging.

    Maybe there's a slight similarity.

    But I didn't see death anywhere.

    Just a Big Brother type of thing.

    7.50/10

    Peace...

    And peep Asylum if you get the chance!
    took the words right out of my mouth... cept i'd up the the score to bout 8.5/10.. dope man

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    fuck them gay replies yo

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