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    Art of Murder

    To Kill

    Unethical horror to the torture in tormented living
    w/more vivid growth of gore enhances demented killing
    Chilling?
    ax murdering maniacs attack back;presenting unusual cases
    where blood graces killers with smiles creepin apon their faces
    Veins emerge from the skin while they slowly strip human flesh
    who put you to the test of survival; ending grim in a horrid mess
    To Kill?
    never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
    who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist
    who paint grotesque "scenes" with blood
    not a job..
    a hobby doing deadly "deeds" for fun


    How To Kill....

    The antics are endless, dependent to tactics or a death despensing reflex
    sensing a menace venting an instant kill is when white light reflects next
    but death from a vet inflicts pain ending sick, not easy and quick
    world full of pricks playing mind games and phsyically harmful tricks
    chains and whips blades slit taped wrists just to begin the deadly intention
    with bodly incisions, including fluent bruising to suffocation to ease the tention
    next testing blunt objects that connect to necks paralyzing an escape
    planning to rape? sizing your "date" tied in place and silent with duct tape
    or torture slowly by slicing parts of a body enduring through screams of pain
    seeing there own slaying, begins to fade into a tainted bloody phase of haze
    black and blue face runs cold, one more cut to show the impacts made
    searchers parade for the rotting body taped tight in a plastic garbage bag
    blood infests the entrity of the murder scene soon to be clean of it
    now a killer fleeing in a blood painted fleece already knows.....
    ...this is not the last we will see of him

    To kill.....means a victim is found

    body bound in materials managing to seal a hiding corpse; is key
    ofcourse the remorse for the family is towards the horrible horror story
    Stench makes you gag of all the victims who show a terrible way to go
    authority believes we can deface these killers through there victims
    ....How so?
    when the victims face dont show
    !


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    Fuck the links.


    Structre = dope. Wordplay = Great. Flow = Wonderfull. Metaphores = Kick Ass. Story =Killer lol. Spekz = A God.

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    thanx for the feedback..

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    Wow...this was a really dope piece. The flow was perfect and the emotion was there the entire time.

    never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
    who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist

    ^^^favorite part, I loved the rhyming and use of vocabulary throughout that really brought this piece to a whole other level, stay dope lol

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    Thanx for the feedback...

    upping for some more!
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    Quick up before i get off work lol...

    ..ill return all favors ..when i get the time!!

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    bomb bomity...good read. um starting with structure, that hot...the verses came clear, held meaning, kept rythm, felt artistic. the concept of murder as an art, is rather ironic, but holds a truth i guess, the message was fathomable. i mean i got it right. the adlib of your piece was off the wall. every sentence you threw out a punch with a verb, two nouns, adverbs, adjectives, particibles. the piece had a lot of color, not much personification...nor any similies or metaphor...but still a good read. lookin foward to reading another, or maybe doin a collab, review my piece and let me know.

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    ^^thank you for the good feedback..

    ill do my best to get at ur piece..
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    kinda plain, kinda complex in a good way. nothin was wrong with the piece. it was alittle short but it was great. the flow was nice and the lines werent too long.
    I'm not necessarily the original, more like the new but don't ever compare me to another.

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    I left some wack feed earlier lol.

    I liked this peice mainly cuz ity was a great story and flow. The worplday was very mature and the creativity was nice. The structre was the only thing I didnt care for but oh well lol. I like the fact that you did a great topic unlike most heads now days.
    10-10

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    Upping cuz im bored..and can!
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    ^^I liked this piece, and never got the amount of feedback i would have liked..

    so i bring new light to this write!

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    wow...just wow....this om was dope...not much to say...flow was really good..a couple of lines were off...this had some nice multies...vocab was nice not simple but not over done...strutre was off....i didnt like it one bit...a very creaitve drop...deff not played...this was really good...the whole story line was impressive...i aint see much work like this...just wow not much to say lmao...good shit homie...rtf if u can..
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    Thanx Dj... i take a looksy at ur piece...but boo at you boo'n my structure lol ..j/p

    Thanx again.
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    this is a great peice one of the best peices ive read i really liked the topic it it really haunted you after you read it and kept me interested through out the whole thing it was grusome at some points but just enough to make it intresting the flow was perfect i could hear this being played on a beat i have to one of my peices saw some nice vocab in there and all of it was fitted in place well the structure was good i like how you were direct about it and sperated everything the word play was ill i liked it especilly at the end so great peice hope to see more of ur writing
    leave feed on the om in my sig
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