W(v) Championship Match: Koalatee vs Bareknuckles

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Championship Match..

Champion- Koalatee vs Challenger- Bareknuckles

Verses due tuesday, March 16th.
Voting ends thursday/friday.

topic: Long live the king.

[Bare Knuckles]

1. Freeman vs. Penskills
2. Nic Caesar vs. Key-Low
3. T West vs. Phrantik
4. Deacon vs. Syanidal

[Koalatee]

A spherical existance - one hinged on an awesome carousel
The king, a sheikh at heart, is an expert in drawing parallels
To The King, travels known; in effect, his plot was born in candles
He`s Jesus Christ (with sun-stained skin, and not adorned in sandals)
Only visionaries can say, at first, they felt a monster was born
Born, that is, son of `some female` and a wealthy entrepeneur
Now saviour of the promised land - that his Dad had not defended
His childhood `roots` have been unearthed, & his travels documented
Flash-forward, audience; a bucket hat, the brim sequesters eyes
& morphs his Middle-Eastern look to the type of image Westernized
Not unlike The King, the media trashed and reckoned something. .
That intended to downplay the looks of the brashest second coming
He laughed it off; everywhere, he`s forced to redundantly knock scorn
At the movie theater, he laughs at `Passion` and munches on popcorn
If life`s defined by money - then, assets frozen, his wealth is deciding
As for physicalities - ` reportedly, ` the King`s health is declining. .
His armies still victorious; ever-stalling, yet unscathed in retreats
While the King fine-dines with his princess and sun-bathes in Tikrit
What`s the Mid-Eastern status quo? Suppose we lose precious hoards
Of creativity - & use the same name as the most overused metaphor
Would that do it? Federal attention? The son emits an utter joy. .
And is tanned in American limelight, as `Time's` unofficial cover-boy
A tidal wave of pessimism; inducing the woeful tides of fright. .
That encompass the Western world: the King globalized his fight
Though throneless, the world`s state is in debt and barely bold . .
His brimmed-hat replaced by a velvet crown of red and marigold
Dwelling in caves, say the feds; the pushed spiels maul their queries
Contrasting fashion - the King plays Poker while Bush deals solitary
The parallels are striking; reigning in a place where pests are hurled
Not the Middle-East, folks. Believe his word rules the Western World
Usama: all-the-while laughing and pinching frets he sings:
` Long Live the King! ` . . .
The waves echo in `his cave` - a likely home for the quintessential King

[Bare Knuckles]

the air was crisp and vibrant - the sky was scarce of distress
and you could feel the gentle winds comb the hairs on your head
the birds were singing proudly - their songs were getting lost in
a world of their own - while the air was growing thick with promise
yet i hear echoes in the walls whispering - “long live the king”
but hope is a dying candle that’s been lost in the wind

sleepless nights once again set in his ear
as he spends every moment counting sheep that never appear

he was as dark as the night with a heart full of gold
using clay to make life into a masterpiece as it started to mould
some called him the reverend - some said he was definitely king
but when it’s all done and dusted - he’ll still be proud of his ebony skin
his calling was shunned and rebelled by murderous faults
while everyday he’d be bombarded by rotten fruit and verbal assaults
was it worth his salt? or did he simply take a pinch too many?
how could he manage his people when the weight was already too heavy?
and many days he had spent alone - either sat or kneeled
as the wrinkles across his head lined up more soldiers for the battlefield
he was plagued by animosity - trapped in dreams that tossed his sleep
it made him stop and reach for what’s right before his loss was grief
and it cost him things that people would never sacrifice
but the colour of his skin pushed him on - and that was the price

sleepless nights once again set in his ear
as he spends every moment counting sheep that never appear

he fought for beliefs - he talked on what he wanted to see
and what he wanted to see was every person stop and then speak
instead of causing the loss and the grief of living a life
that was based on unhappiness and fill with wishes to die
so he took actions into his own hands and began fighting to prosper
cause all he wanted was clearer skies even though whites were the problem
so god bless reverend king and the light he shed with caring wisdom
cause if it wasn’t for him - then our world today would be so very different

and as i lay awake on the sheets of my bed...

i have a dream that we won't be based on the colour of our skin.

http://www.mdarchives.state.md.us/ec.../html/king.jpg

[Bare Knuckles]

Uppin` for votes!

[Steven William]

Bare-very nice twist..I read qualitys way early
tho so didnt wanna go back and read it but after
I read yours I had to since they so close...
imagery was great and the twist was shocking...
also vocab was very well used and flow n rhyme
scheem were good keep at it...

Koalatee-verse was just a bit better because of
the twists bothwere great but I liked yours more,
very good imagery VERY good and vocab was nicely
used throughout this piece also it flowed the whole way
through and was very good overall keep it up...

My V/Koalatee...I was gonna sit on the fence on this one but Bare wasn't quite enough...good job to both though...

[Mag...]

Koala... you were solid down the stretch... basically a full account on a topic... didn't think you strayed at all... the multis were a bit bare... the vocab and wordplay were paramount... the lines seemed a bit stretched but it still worked... overall an above average drop...

Bare... you had a really good concept for this topic... and the delivery was standard... the imagery wasn't as crisp at first but then things started to come together... the only thing that wasn't up to snuff was some of the flow wasn't coming off right... not sure i can place it on anything... just phrasing i guess...

vote = koala

[Bare Knuckles]

0-2.


Keep `em coming.

[Topic]

these both were really nice verses...both original and creative....Koal came creative like usual and used alot of big words again....Bk i felt had a nice flow and nice wrodplay
but in my mind...i beleive the one with the better verse today is koalatee

[deacon]

HMMM....these both were interesting pieces at hand... I read Koals and i liked it....couple parts were ify but over all nice read....Had a decent twist that slowly unraveled as you read on but nothing insane....Bare you came nicely as well...I felt the emotional sentiment that your were trying to convey shined through more so in the begining than the end...seemed like if you would have stayed on track through the whole piece you would have had this one.....This was a decent battle indeed...Im going to have to give this one to

koalatee

[Maven.]

koalatee 5-0
bareknucles 3-1