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  1. December 15th, 2003, 04:03 AM #1
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    Stuck

    I was told to live life to the fullest, to accept all its glory..
    But it seems as if its a new chapter, with the same story..
    These facades bore me, I yearn to see your true colors..
    To see the world..& for me to be its next great wonder..
    But I grow dumber, seemingly backtracking forget how to ride a bike..
    Try as I might, ill never find the strength to put forth effort..
    Using my pride as a shield..so it isnt my feelings that get hurt..
    Measure my minds worth..and open my eyes to finally see..
    Cent-A-Mental...Heh..It looks as if its only valueable to me..
    Im trying to sleep... FUCKING SALESMEN, JUST LET ME BE..
    Maybe its not who I had previously thought..
    And there goes another missed opportunity...
    So this is me..Stuck where I am but home is where I make it..
    Cuz tomorrow will be more of the same thing...


    Another Risk Not Taken.
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  2. December 15th, 2003, 04:16 AM #2
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    Re: Stuck

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=98790


    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97437
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  3. December 15th, 2003, 04:21 AM #3
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    I was feeling the concept.. I've wrote to this on several occasions.. This came of well.. There wasn't no explosive lines but the flow and emotion was def.. I know you can do better.. But I guess you just used this for escaping boredom and emotion outlet.. So good job.. Pz
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  4. December 15th, 2003, 06:53 AM #4
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    i told you about this on AIM you plural tanjic love muscle .. flow was okay .. content was average, emotion and such needs working on .. transitions were off to me .. its mainly all down to lack of multi's and internals, if you had more of them, your flow / content / structure / weording / transitions would all go +10 in the cool ness stakes.


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  5. December 15th, 2003, 02:00 PM #5
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    creative
    nice vocabulary
    it was dope cuz it got better toward the end
    very dope
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  6. February 12th, 2004, 10:06 PM #6
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  7. February 17th, 2004, 07:32 PM #7
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    it was dope...

    but dez where the fuck have ya been!??!?!?!
    get at me on aim
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  8. August 31st, 2004, 04:32 AM #8
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  9. August 31st, 2004, 12:35 PM #9
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    yo, this was ok, kinda soft in the beginning but you finished off strong, flow wasn't perfect but I caught it though, nice wording....you did alright

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