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  1. #1
    .Skribblez.
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    Rewind..

    My tape's playing smoothly
    No skips, everything calm and relaxing
    I'm happy now
    Because I have you
    Because I have sumone to love
    Because I have sumone to love me
    Then I look to the past
    All the times I wanted to give up this life
    Because I thought there was nothing to live for
    Because I had nothing to look forward to
    Because you weren't here
    I don't want to go back to those times
    I never want to go back to those days
    And I never want to rewind back to that part in this tape
    So I broke the stereo. . .

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    simple put, but holds a deep message, with lots of emotion.
    i could tell you that this coudl be longer, with more explantions, and more detail, but i think the way it is now is perfect for what it is. Theres not much you can say about a piece so short and self explanitory like this, other then i liked it, it and was nicely written. the last line was my fave!

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    HotRod
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    it was all right but not complex at all it was simple as 1 2 3

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    I liked it alot. Even though the structure was simple andthe rhyme scheme. You expressed the emotions of this poem well.
    "SEARCH AND YOU SHALL FIND"
    PLEASE BELIEVE IT!!!!!!

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    .Skribblez.
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    Thanks alot.. I appreciate the feedback

  6. #6
    skrawni ASK RRD
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    yo i thought it was nice
    had a sense that u accomplished something
    then something happened that caused u 2 brake the sterio
    which was probly something went wrong with yer audio i soppose
    well good piece nonetheless
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

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