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Thread: Chess Anyone? - By: Soultress & Emcee Universe

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    Emcee Universe
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    Chess Anyone? - By: Soultress & Emcee Universe

    Chess Anyone?
    By: Soultress & Emcee Universe


    "Battered Wife" - Soultress
    Our loves union now sealed within this band of gold
    But the person that I despised in you has now begun to unfold
    Smiles and soft caresses conceal the blackness to my flesh
    Weapons of your "love" break me I want to start out fresh
    Gentle night's encounters now only found in my memories
    No more "I love you's", morning comes with fresh appologies
    Bonded by marriage I am confined to life down upon my knees
    My mind grows weaker each day I live with loves disease
    With the dying of the sun your fist once again brings me pain
    But this time I did not shed a tear, this time I did not complain
    My heart remained calm, it beat rhythmic with your shallow breath
    Without hesitation I took back years of pain, I smiled upon your death




    "Confused Husband" - Emcee Universe
    Thunder shakes the heart shaped matress that I lay upon
    Thinking of what we're in, If we're really a match for life
    Leaned over to turn on the light, But the switch was gone
    Stood up and walked to bathroom, Slowly I began to cry
    Looked into the mirror and stared myself in the eyes
    Turned off the light, and sat next to my love
    Closed her mouth, which was so cute to see open
    Closed my eyes and asked God to watch from above
    Kissed her cheek softly, My true love Im sure hopein'
    Three months pass sence our beautiful wedding day
    And now I noticed a difference in your behavior
    I question it, And you told me not to think that way
    I show you evadence of your change, Now I need A Savior?
    Saying good night, You rush off to bed - leaving the kiction
    While I watched the news running past twelve thirty at night
    Later on As I put down the tolet seat cause I hate her bitchin'
    I noticed the image of my love, Standing Holding a knife
    "Are you okay?" I ask as I back towards the door
    "I loved You" She responded stabbing herself
    Her body hitting the carpetless Floor




    "Battered Wife"
    Alone now with my lost thoughts mixing this cocktail of insanity
    I feel nothing, yet I am overcome with sorrow, do I possess humanity?
    My hands long ago cleaned but still I feel the blood won't go away
    The love that brought together two perfect souls is now but mere decay
    Walking down roads that I fear will never end I long to be released
    I hold onto my new hope of freedom, No more battered night at least
    I brush the misty tears from my eyes as I inspect my new surroundings
    Unfamiliar scenery greets my view, fear has me and my heart is pounding
    Lost in a surburban jungle, no where to turn my heart sinks with defeat
    Solitude is forced upon me and with lonliness I must now compete
    Each breath burns like fire now as I lower to the ground on my knees
    My breathing shallows as my own sobs are joined with ones just thru the trees
    His shoulders shake gently as his silloutte sits restlessly upon his deck
    So with caution I approach, fascinated by the mirror image of this wreck
    Standing before him his eyes raise to meet mine and I lay my hand against his face
    He cast his eyes down my body as his tears fall harder while he takes my embrace


    "Confused Husband"
    Never have I seen such hurt, such pain in someone's eyes
    Until this woman with a soul burnt, Came into my blury sight
    "What's you're story?" She asked, Couldnt believe her half a smile
    I could only blink and lower my head, For my head was running miles
    "Come with me" She said demanding an answer from me
    "She loved me" I responded, Looked up, Clouds far as I could see
    Telling her the story of what happened that night
    Our eyes stayed together, as her eyes vanished the white
    "Oh my God...." She mumbled ever so low in tone
    "What's wrong?" I asked, "Nothing.. Just not totally in the Zone"
    "I got an idea!" I declaired on that shadow glazed night
    I went inside and picked up a brown colored carton
    "My wife wouldnt play me" I said, Sitting straight up right
    She moved the Horse inna "L" motion, taking my pon....

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    ~*Lil' Miss Caramel*~ Calisto's Avatar
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    ok, overveiw beginning to end:

    the title even got me y'all!! That's what made me want to read this. Which ever one of y'all came up with that should give yourself a big pat on the back!!
    The first lil bit... all I could think of was "Oh no! He beats her! " like another poem that I read by Liba Dee, I'd been talkin to her about abuse and stuff so it's close to home, or at least what what's been in my mental the last few days. Your writing style is a lot like mine Soulstress. Which made things a lot easier to read when it came to your parts. And at one point I could imagine your familiarity with the lines that you'd written. I dont' know why that came into my head of all things but it did.

    Emcee I've never seen anything you've written I don't think. At least I don't recognize the name, but you are talented (I'm sure you know that because not just anyone can pull of a collab with a writer like Soulstress). You had a different approach to a collab, which was cool, you're writing style definatly complements hers and you two make a good team. Not too many people can write poetry well with dialouge because common words are no where near as beautiful as the thoughts that we express while writting, but you still did a great job at that too.
    Over all great peice, you two are a great duet, and I'd love to read more from both of you (even together again if you felt like it) Peace
    Formerly known as ThundaThighz
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    "...For life is not a paragraph.
    And death I think is no parenthesis"-E.E. Cummings

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    Emcee Universe
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    Thanks! Uppin!

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    the medicine man
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    yeh i agree with calisto, the title was intriguing, and made me want to read it.

    i like the role play kinda thing, though i dont think i could do one of those it aint my style, so i respect, the way you pulled it off.
    some nice immagery, and emotion. nice wordplay and i liked the topic.

    overall nice drop

    aiight, wud ya please check mine out

    called
    life, future, death, past
    or sumfin like that

    aiight peace

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    Emcee Universe
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    Thanks Uppin

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    D-PHYLO
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    for real that was tight right there, youll are really good, i wil be looking foward to seeing more of your works.
    keep it up.

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    this was a nice collab
    a real good read
    the title of the people talking is what drew me in to this piece, i first looked at it and noticed the length, and was like goodness, but i read on and i got completely pulled in
    the picture was drawn perfectly with the words you both chose
    both of your talents and way with words compliments the others and really makes this piece stand out and become great read
    keep writing
    i'll continue to read

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    Emcee Universe
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    Thanks... Uppin...

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    Emcee Universe
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    UPPIN

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    Shi
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    i can onli bow to this peice the ending was dope the poem was dope anit wasnt predictable like most things these days...but all in all the poem was dope....have i said that already?...well ne ways i like the ways soulstress spoke on her pain and her satisfaction in her attackers death...and the confused husbanb...that was played perfectly...but id liked this peice much ta tha both of yall...-shi-

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    Emcee Universe
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    Thanks Bro Uppin

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    Emcee Universe
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    Uppin -

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    Emcee Universe
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    please dont sleep lol

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    evilbombsquad
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    nice

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