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Thread: [A Bleeding Heart. .feat. Ruthless]

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    [A Bleeding Heart. .feat. Ruthless]

    Potent

    What does birth define?. . It means to start dying
    Do you recline wit a bleeding heart or start trying?
    Arts crying out to be captured unlike all else living
    We'll never find rapture while are health is slipping
    Never getting better & forever etching on retinas
    We're really being silenced never retching editors
    Thats the gag. .We are continuelly being silenced
    If you loose the cries of a baby, thats yo retirment
    Or loosing violence, your introducing confinement
    Reducing refinement leads to the bleeding hearts
    Pulling yo hair out over life shows receeding parts
    Does it!? Or when your bringing life into this earth
    Or are you!? Including actors upon sites that hurt
    Listen to birds chirp or mentality of men go bizzurk
    [I]The system doesn't work. .WE DO!!
    My heart bleeds for all those used!!


    Ruthless

    . .Ruthless. .

    How deep can one sink in such disblief/
    How far can one swim amid a sea of grief/
    How is one safe from the company sorrow keeps/
    And how stup!d is the human race/
    How unknowing, mean and disgrace/
    How wastefully used is the seamen/
    Which all humans from none begun/
    If this is the fate for humans all/
    There is no cure but to rot in hell/
    If I died, would you even know/
    Just one little bullet, one single blow/
    its place; and its facial expression, in an irony/
    Such joy, is swept away by a salty tear, one too many/
    And sweet memories of with them/
    becomes a haunting ordeal, which fates redeam/
    How can my faith remain and my skin not feel pain/
    if sleep has become the cousin of death I'm going insane/
    An eye for an eye I guess that was a Myth/
    No1 is immortal but thats how much we fear Death/
    Pot` Ed.

    I dropped to show RM what hot was;
    And this faggot got Butterflies in his stomach the size of Mothra

    Your text is just another weak display
    One fist to your eye'll make it go through that black album remix phase. - Saviour Arraign

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    Thar was some hot shit both of the verses was ILL i liked it
    End of all game you have chosen ya path.

    Now you too can be a victom of DocDizzie's Wrath

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    They say I'm a fight risk A.T.'s Avatar
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    not a bad peice...
    potent had good structure, as always... his vocab was
    really good, and the content was definately there... it
    was a really nice drop that you had....

    Ruthless- your shit flowed alright... you should put more
    content into your verse so readers can visualize the shit you
    say... plus it would help you on your structure... other than that
    you had a pretty ill verse... very nice to read...

    Props^^^

    can yall hit up my open mic:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...419#post876419
    DayumNation

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