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    Untitled (poem)

    this isn't exactly metered, more of a wordy prose... its not polished, it just all sort of rushed out. but see what ya'll make of this.



    Who drank their fill of sodomy and waste
    the dredges of a crumbling world of stone
    Forsaken. Forsook. and left here, standing all alone.
    In overcoats, gray jackets, to sit blinking
    in the light of morning rain.

    Young men all; and we are drunk with death
    stone limbs to move, to stroll beneath the sky
    gray buildings that the last of them have left
    someone is talking, putting eyes and lips to sleep
    And stairwells, left echoing to ruin.

    II.

    Bitch, I have looked at you
    I have thought of you.
    As I recited algorithms, tables
    I have often thought.

    And so I take hold
    of your calm elbows,
    limbs/ of your throat with fingers
    and give a shout
    and shriek, as you fall to the drizzled grass
    from shattered glass, a window of the labrynth
    with ruined lips, and hair a broken mess:
    this knife will say how much of you I miss!
    this mirror will show how much of you I lost
    this clock will slice the seconds all day long
    to words oblivious, and lost.

    III.

    to babble, words are soundless, and have breath
    the noises that I speak, to hold you close
    are invalid, a strain of frightened talk
    that drinks to ruin, then blames good intentions for its hell.

    So boys, lets drink to this, and speak to pain.
    that sits quietly on our shoulders
    in the rain
    while we walk yet again, again the same.
    through years and months that follow, and that pass.
    there is a point beyond which there can be no return. this point must be reached--Franz Kafka

  2. #2
    MoparMaddness
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    Nice overall piece. The rhyme scheme was different then most and the structure was alright. You put emotion into this poem and that is an attention grabber for people to read and post to your threads. Keep writing. Look forward to reading more from you.

    MM

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