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    Broken Silence

    I've held in my anger for over a decade//
    i feel like a kettle with pressure, i'm gunna explode like a army gernade//
    philosophy, was the key to any rookie battle//
    but this bitch got too involved, n made it personal//
    i don't take a dis- comfort to any bitch who fights//
    but to throw insults about my whole life? that shit ain't right//
    fuck fighting with words, i'll use the mic//
    spit heavy lines of metaphors, take a dis-like, i can do this all night//
    it's been along time coming//
    ever since u gave me that drumming//
    about how i should turn around n start running//
    but this time, i'm putting it out there for people to see//
    this broken silence now, is exceptionally free//
    so take a rain check, on how u might come back mouthing//
    by the time you put ya words together, i wud of finished with ya bitch mounting//
    i've kept this hidden for over years now//
    finally i've broken the silence, n people can see how//
    what a coward you were when it came to close to comfort//
    how you hid behind your click, when the flame got too hot n u got burnt//
    i don't wanna publicly humiliate you//
    i wanna expose, n impose how u got fucked with a nose by each memeber of ur crew//
    so now the silence has been broken, the truths finally out//
    say what the fuck you wanna say, set-ignorance will still be about...
    "Blood 4 Lyf"... "S'happenin mah dawg? .. Got nuttin but love 4 you.."

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    StOrMiN lYrIcS
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    pritty good pritty good, you have some week spots you need to work on, but it had a hot concept

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    not bad, it was ight....
    flow was gud and lyrics were ok....

    use more multis and better vocab....

    was this a remix of so solid's version or did ya just get da idea from that song...

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    yeah the flow was good, it read good, but i would try introducing some more complex vocab and rhyming scheme, and some multis, this will help with the overall feel of your verse........but not a bad attempt, likes the subject, so keep spittin and think about what i said, see ya...............
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    pedro nok
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    not bad...................rooom for improvement.................raed some tutorials......................................... .........

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    it was aite flow was so so ... didnt flow all to well. u should elevate on the vocab though its average.metas were there but some didnt flow all to well.. not a bad peice keep spittn and elevate, one.

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    haha, this guy bit the name from so solid crew.

    s'alright, not the best thing, you gotta up ya vocab and your multis and shit.

    hit me up on msn messenger and ill help you elevate

    oxigin1@hotmail.com

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