Born With One Eye (True Feeling)...peep

[rule]

Tryed something on'a true story...not to much emotion but a thought it was pretty creative...feedback wud be helpful..and i was planning on doing a collab on misfortunite problems...anybody up for it..just holla...enjoy


Eyes are an important facter in our everyday life
Helping us through the worry of human sacriface
Guiding us along the path of envy hate and love
2 eyes are healthy but yet wut if you have one?
Does it change things or does it not matter?
For me it was a humilating state a big facter
Played a role i wanted to quit never finish
Annoyed of'a paralized eye in my bodily image
Walking into walls an smashing a valuble
People treating me like i was always incapable
Before i new it i was nic named "left eye blindie"
Only 7 years old and i was haunted by aginy
Demons were closing in on my inner self
destroying my life showing love is wealth
But i was poor never feeling to warm
Tears were rain drops i was caught in'a starm
Asking lord why was i even chose tobe born
People not reliezing the hate of my eyes form
Insane thoughts of my eyez creating motose's
Becoming to but i aint a child form of moses
So i just stood as still as'a photo an glanced
In the mirrow said to myself one chance...
To earn some pride so i took it as i strived
People laughed so hard that they dryed
Was i even alive or did i die on the feild
Trying to play soccer but i wounds didnt heal
Only made them worse so i tryed to leave earth
For my devilish unwanted curse...i just wonna be normal
But how everbody thinks im an animal cuz of my formal
Eye situation an the ways of my unguided pu'pills
Taunted by my infortinate one eye vision still
But as i grow and i determine to find a cure
I stand by myself with a heart thats pure
That one day we will all stand clear..with eyes of wisdom
But until that day i garente u no matter the virous u have freedom

[rule]

Uppen

[Smooth JT]

very nice peice. when i read it i did feel it had enough emotion and it made me think and see from your point of view. Great job, keep dropping peace. JT

ps ppl gotta stop sleeping on stuff

[Q.S]

Oh Lord! Now Thats A Nice Piece That Dont Deserve To Be Slept On....

Keep Up The Good Work!

[Spoken]

I stand by myself with a heart thats pure

^ i loved that line

man hes right why is this gettin slept on!? but alot of pieces get slept on here i guess when they shouldnt be

you said at the beginning you thought it didnt have much emotion, maybe to you it didnt but im telling you this piece sure did have some emotion in it, lots of different ones to, i caught some hope, anger, dissapointment, hate and lots of strength!

it really was a unique piece instead of a played topic, and you got across this with ease and it looks good, and sounds good, it all seems so natural like they just all flow together.

my love

~Tera~
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