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    Dr.Gonzo
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    My Passion

    writing helps me with alot of problems, helps me sort things, helps me clear my mind...


    With every letter comes a drop of blood
    With every word comes my first love
    With every thought comes my heart
    Every sentence brings out pain
    Every period brings a tear
    Everything I show here is all that I fear
    Things people couldn’t understand
    Things people wouldn’t understand
    Cause I am a selfness being
    Never thinking just seeing
    I’m ripping out my inner lining
    Reveling what I am and I can be
    I must stand strong and face reality
    Stand strong and raise my voice
    Scream from heaven to hell all that there is
    And when im done I will stand alone
    And leave behind this drop of blood
    And my first love
    And I lay down my heart
    Fight off my pain
    Cry a single tear
    And laugh at fear
    Then maybe you will understand


    give me some feedback

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    This is deep. Good drop. this is one way many people use to get out stuff and help solve there problems. good structure, word flow was good. keep elavating. hit up someof mine if you pleez. spect JT
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