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    What I'm about..

    check this and post some replies y'all, respect and thanks ahead of time...

    I'm the source and energy forcing enemies to watch their steps
    Embodying metaphysical principles and ghetto concepts
    Skills adept, already wept, sympathy and regret in me ya never find
    Influenced by my past and drama vast , tainted with a battlin' mind
    People walk around blind, befalled by blamphamous ignorance
    I start cleansing all races of frontin disgraces with no traces of evidence
    Ever since I saw peeps use old supplies, I see right through the disguise
    Fuck, I'll suck ya pre-written papers and spit the ink in ya eyes
    Stop the lies, y'all should stop stealing styles like its a biting buffet
    Shit, I'm half 'black male,' so ya gonna do what I say
    I spray smacking shit like it's cricket, dumping bodies in thickets
    'Ripping' the worthless like they're losing lottery tickets
    ...
    Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia
    Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia
    Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered
    Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards
    Whether ya black, white or asian, it doesnt make a difference
    Flaming words and maiming verbs, burning emcees in every instance
    Making lunches of ya diss, quaking punches never miss, my hits are precise
    Land mine verses make sure emcee's don't 'step' to me twice
    My lines refute rappers reflecting regular pop shit in repute
    Fakes smoking 'trees' giving hoods the 'leave,' forgetting about their 'roots'
    My times seen too much 'current' talent join the 'mainstream' route
    I'll never sell out, this 'seed' grows a different kind of sprout
    Cuz yo, I'm not the type to rap about cars, money and bitches
    I'm the type to leave ya scarred and bloody with stitches..
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    wow....
    vocab was definatly there
    flow was too
    there was really good in my opinion
    keep droppin dawg
    ya got some talent
    peace

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    thanks man, uppin' for feedback
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    THIS WAS A REALLY GOOD PEACE SOME PUNCHES WERE WEAKER THEN EXPECTED BUT YOU FALLOWED THEM WELL I LIKE THIS AND IF YOU LIKE PM ME WE CAN SEE ABOUTE YOU JOINING THE ORDO ABACHO ROSTER
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    That was off the meters, playboy. You raw, I ain't fucking with you..lol. You know who to holla at.

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    Rhyming/Flow
    Flow Was Dope Dawg, You Had A Silkily Smooth LIke Flow, With Good Internals, With A Good Rhymes Sheme Too...8/10

    Vocab/Wordplay
    Very Complexiated Vocab, Don't See Many "Newbs" With This Sort Of Vocab. You Had Great Phrases In Ever Bar, Bars Like:
    " Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia
    Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia"
    - Were Dope, Also:
    "Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered
    Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards"
    - Dope........8/10

    Concept/Topic
    You Had A Good IMage IN Your head About What This Should Be About. And I Think You Played This Topic Out Nicely, Spreading It OUt Throughout The 2 verses..8/10

    Overall
    8/10, Nice "Introductory" Verse, You have A Shit Load Of Potential Dawg, Your gonna Be A Legend At Rb In The Future, Keep Spittin'

    Word!
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    Niggas ask who the fuck I am like they have a case of amnesia
    Inflicting anesthesia, oppenents left as victims of paraplegia
    Mutin' fallen freestyle falters, printing on papers plastered
    Shootin' expecting dads at altars, leaving babies as bastards

    by far the best part of the piece excellent everything gave me goosebumps the talent is there......

    My lines refute rappers reflecting regular pop shit in repute
    Fakes smoking 'trees' giving hoods the 'leave,' forgetting about their 'roots'
    My times seen too much 'current' talent join the 'mainstream' route

    i hate to say this for many reasons but this gave me an eerie feeling of tupac.................

    I'm the source and energy forcing enemies to watch their steps
    Embodying metaphysical principles and ghetto concepts

    "how to write an opening bar 101" you are the teacher and i bow to your skill

    this is an excellent drop i don't think you are a "newbie" and if you are then you are pure talent good luck to you in your future endeavors......................................... ..1

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    "i don't think you are a "newbie" and if you are then you are pure talent good luck to you in your future endeavors......................................... .."

    ahah.. I guess your right in this.. I've been doing this for about 4 months on another site wit some cats that bring it doper than myself (if ya consider me dope).. we're getter a team together to maybe battle some other sites. Our community is majorly small though.. like 1/8 the size of this or less.

    But I almost never cypher, I usually battle (ahah.. my cypher's kinda tainted with the battling flavour at parts )

    Thanks for the feedback so far guys and keep shit coming.. I'll probably drop some more shit another time,

    -Ie
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    bumpin
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    uppin for feedback, tell me if ya have anything and I'll hit it up too..
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    dat shit wuz hot............nice vocab and ish.............i wuz really f

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    THis was pretty tight, dope on the vocab..that made sence. alot of cats over look that. Nice use of metas too, like the cleverness. You got talent keep up the good writing

    Respect your style and opinon so drop by and give feed back on my little 16 bar piece.......

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=75690

    Two

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    AMAZING off the heazy lol that was a great spit man everything was there multies medas punches u had it all 1
    Soft Focus
    ..Returns..

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    thanks a lot guys, I'll be sure to look through your shit too and give feedback on that stuff, and will hit ur shit up fo sho dizzle, but I have to head out now, but I just wanted to say the feedback's much appreciated so far, thanks

    -Ie
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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    ahah what does off the heavy mean? good feedback hehe

    and if y'all give ur feedback, I'll be fair and hit ya back just like dizzle, just post da link
    "..fuck everybody, fuck y'all if you doubt me," -Em

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