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    Dead and Famous
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    Life Vanished

    just a little poem i wrote on a napkin
    its published in a book too

    What have you done?
    Where have you gone?
    Why aren't you here
    Engulfed in my arms?
    Where are you now
    Are you thinking of me?
    I'm lost without you
    Are you without me?

    Im curious to see who people think its about



    just gettin back on this site to let yall know
    pz DF

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    Bout a relationsihp or somehtin? that's what i got out of it,
    or maybe a pet or sometin haha, i dunno tho
    but it was like a nusery rhym type deal

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    nah close, its a type of relationship tho

    like i said i wrote it on a napkin so it wasnt sum huge peice or nuthin just a little sumden to get me back on the site

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    i think mabe a stuffed animal or sumthin but like Krem said a relationship~1love~

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    this gettin many hits so fuck it

    its about my pops dyin, i had to watch the whole thing happen

    a lot of my shit is now 5 years in march its fucked up


    pz DF
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    Shiznit's Thoughts:

    Emotions from someone you have lost. The fact that it was written some way that its like for a relationship about 2 inlove human beings depicted itself to reflect as a love poem. So others thought that it was somewhere over that idea. to be honest i did too but the only difference is..i pictured it as longing for someone that you have lost already and thinking of how it would bring back those memories.

    It must be really hard for you to lost your dad. I been in somewhat the same situation but my dad didnt die. He left when i was 11 and after 5 years i finally saw him again. It sucked back in those times where he was far away from us. But i know your pains donty equal mine but i understand how it feels to lost someone that youve loved sooo much.

    Simple with very deep meaning.

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    I am sorry for your loss...

    emotion came thru even in a short poem, I was thinking it was about your relationship with the heavenly father. I thought it was more from God's perspective, then you mentioned it was about your father. Nice drop, I hope you are doing better today. Life can have an adverse effect on us, it can also unlock hidden places within our minds, tap into them and use them to your advantage. Stay up...

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    Short, but said so much.

    It had a desperation to it. A pleading desperation.

    I related to it. Losing someone in such a way. The gradual demise. Though slightly different from the 'view' you wrote it from. That doesn't matter to me.

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