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    Evolution

    So, mankind survives
    Frantic for breath
    As hope dies –
    Suffocating humanity.
    Desperation floods the world
    Giving birth to an epidemic of fear.
    Hate conquers us all,
    Whilst love is lost..
    Revenge easily becomes the answer
    Alas, the questions are wrong.
    So, united – We die
    A little death each day
    Watching, as the world bathes in blood.
    Slowly, peace is distinguished
    Replaced by a new holocaust-
    Modern Man.
    Suicidal by nature,
    Our own unmerciful Lucifer-
    Hates creation.
    Bred from sadness, the bringer of grief
    Damning us, Entwined
    As we kill each other-
    My brothers, my sisters..

    An angels breath
    A willows whisper
    A tear drops

    As we kill each other.

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    prophiit
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    I liked the piece it kinda took me on this roller coaster of emotion. There was this mixture of sadness and anger in it. But it was very good. The topic of death and the evillnes of war is kinda played. Although that might not have been your intended point thats what I took away from it. Thank you for the experience!!!

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    Smoothly dark. Taking one through the emotions and thoughts of yourself through your eyes.

    In an extreme way, depicting some of the wrongs of modern day world. More to the point, of modern day humanity.

    Though at times you lightly trod. I thought the way you went with this piece, you could've dug much further and extensively. But nonetheless, what you did dig into, the general area, it was fucking good..

    I enjoyed reading this. I nod my head at some of the things said. Also some of the subtlety used to concentrate on certain things also appreciated...

    Ended very nicely. I looked at this with very little cynicism, making the ending even more effective.

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    tight piece,it was up and down but still tight,keep droppin.~1~


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    Thanks for the feedback peeps

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