~Spoken Word~

[Uben. Sonned]

Kicks Back....Watches Tel Lie Vision....Writes~

Bodysnatchers Wanna Come About To
Intercept The Visions, These Visions
Of True Christians....True Catholicism
Whos With Em?wow jus the intro alone was interestin you know right from da beginnin its gonna be good, the way u decided to this topic

Homosexual Priests That Claim Theyre Not Comittin,
Sins While They're Abominations,Got My Nomination!touchy subject its weird i have only seen a very few do this topic in poetry

Theres Not Many Things That God Dosent Approve Of,
Brainwashing For Five Hundred Alex(?!?!)
These Individuals Need To Cool Off
And Rejuvinate Their Principles,Alex? your right god doesnt aproove of wat these people are doing good choice of vocab on this and the past few lines very persuing words which makes a reader want to keep going

Sunday Morning Saints To Monday Morning Sinners,
Food For Thoughts Served As Daily Brunch
They Often Wonder Whats For Dinner, (?!?!)
[ damn never really think bout stuff like this happenin in your area and thatd be very scary if the shit ;like this happened in sumones town and havin sumone write bout it makes it even more worth facin to stop it the assult[/B]

A Night Cleansed Of....The Stinch Of,
Child Mollestation..More Friends (?!?!)
Last Meal Reenactments (?!?!)
Alter Boy Pagents...Idolizing Michael Jacksons (?!?!)
is this part true its kinda like weird like you had your imagination get away from you on that part

Whats In The Center Of The Frame Is Tainted
But Who Has Ever Aced A "Purity" Test, Right?
Run Along And Splash Your Holy Water
Like A Good Little Boy Our Lives Will Just Be Perfect Now,
But Whos "Pure"?...Wanna Know Whos Really "Pure"?
wow seem very smart in religion and da facts of the rules in which they do and dont particapate in but you must not make poeple think your against them but i know that you were gettin your point across which is good to do

Only One Who Predicted That They Would
Say You Will See Death As We See It,
Now Every Single Church Has The Story Remixed,

Mormon Presbertarian Catholic Baptist Non Denominational,
Non Confrontational With Exceptionally Well Skills At Acting......
good ending to a excellent poem it had me wantin to keep reading no matter wat it was apoem that you couldnt pass up the oppertunity to read cause it was an interesting poem that spoke the true and disturbing facts bout wats goin on in the religous part of the united states wat need to be fixed basically not much everythin was on key the flow was there the words were not to simple and to offensive so i dunno why they are flippin out on it but i htink it was a really good peice i give it a 9/10 for the creativity imaginary quality and wordplay
good job and keep writin man youll be great at this

[sILLable]

this was tight,a bit edgy,and touch subject for ppl,keep spittin.

[Content]

Thanks Diverse And Thanks Eye I Appreciate
The Reply And Am Happy To Represent...

Double T Is Cool As Well...Just Has A Lil Temper

Peace

[prophiit]

I loved the subject matter and agree entirely. very few people have the balls to go against the hypocritical societies moral fiber this does and i applaud it. the rhyme scheme the flow of it was just icing on the cake. if only someone could e-mail this to the head of every major religion.....................................

[Split-eyez]

I was taken aback with this drop... seriously, I can totally relate to it. Nice drop and nice view on this world of society. You had a great scheme and a great message. Keep droppin shit like this.
Respect...

[Content]

thank you split eyez and prophit for your replys,
showing that your not close minded and could
see exactly where I was coming from..its apprecited

~Content~

P.S

Prophit..check your messages

Tourniquet..welcome..if there are any problems
speak with thudathighz, myself, or eye-m-ill

[Calisto]

Wow, I was completely blown away by this peice. The emotion that was in this states blatantly that you are disgusted with modern day "christianity" and then the fact that this was written as well as it was speaks very highly of you. Because not many people can master strong emotions and writting well at the same time, ususally it's one or the other. My favorite line was "Sunday Morning Saints To Monday Morning Sinners". Because I have been around people that have that "holyer than thou" type attitude and it ticks me off. You either completely devote yourself to Christ or you live in sin like majority of America, which is no biggy but there is no grey area in Christianity... I mean I will be the first to admit that I am not a saint, nor have I ever claimed to be one, but there are people who have gone out Saturday night and come into the place where I worship and claim to be holy smelling like weed, alcohol and other things which I am not going to mention. People do take certain aspects of what should be the average Christian life and make fun of them... What should be a stigma on the Catholic church has become a mockary and something that these men get away with because America finds irony humerous. The situation disgusts many people, and it's not everyday that you see some one who can take a topic like this and write so well on it. Making valid points in few rhyming words is a skill, you most definatly posses it. This was an amazing peice... I enjoyed the entire thing and I even like how the title plays into it. (call me odd but understanding something that comes from some one so deep makes me feel a little bit smarter...) Peace bud, keep writtin

[Content]

^Wow^ Can I Kick It? Yes I Can! :Kicks Calisto:

thank you so much for taking the
time to write me a novel girl it
realls means sommit to me seriously..
hopefully thats a good thing that you
might think differenty about things nowadays..
were all here for elevation nothing more nothing less
~crew love~

~Content~

[Content]

Well..I Fealt Like It...

Now It Can Rest In Peace

@ Minus A Plus C Equals All Rights Reserved

[Content]

no look pass

[UnSpOkeN Wurdz]

tough subject i agree...but nice...scheme was packed tighly together and words mixed well...ur title sound slike my name tho...nigga jockin my name...lol j/p

[Content]

unspoken wordz thank you for the reply
because I appreciate it..and ima sucker

for any closeminded individual a spoken
word is presented in coffee shops,
on open mic nights....behind a podeum..
def fuckin poetry on HBO..fuckin benite

la paz

[DeadlyAlliance]

Originally posted by Uben. Sonned
Kicks Back....Watches Tel Lie Vision....Writes~

Bodysnatchers Wanna Come About To
Intercept The Visions, These Visions
Of True Christians....True Catholicism
Whos With Em?wow jus the intro alone was interestin you know right from da beginnin its gonna be good, the way u decided to this topic

Homosexual Priests That Claim Theyre Not Comittin,
Sins While They're Abominations,Got My Nomination!touchy subject its weird i have only seen a very few do this topic in poetry

Theres Not Many Things That God Dosent Approve Of,
Brainwashing For Five Hundred Alex(?!?!)
These Individuals Need To Cool Off
And Rejuvinate Their Principles,Alex? your right god doesnt aproove of wat these people are doing good choice of vocab on this and the past few lines very persuing words which makes a reader want to keep going

Sunday Morning Saints To Monday Morning Sinners,
Food For Thoughts Served As Daily Brunch
They Often Wonder Whats For Dinner, (?!?!)
[ damn never really think bout stuff like this happenin in your area and thatd be very scary if the shit ;like this happened in sumones town and havin sumone write bout it makes it even more worth facin to stop it the assult

A Night Cleansed Of....The Stinch Of,
Child Mollestation..More Friends (?!?!)
Last Meal Reenactments (?!?!)
Alter Boy Pagents...Idolizing Michael Jacksons (?!?!)
is this part true its kinda like weird like you had your imagination get away from you on that part

Whats In The Center Of The Frame Is Tainted
But Who Has Ever Aced A "Purity" Test, Right?
Run Along And Splash Your Holy Water
Like A Good Little Boy Our Lives Will Just Be Perfect Now,
But Whos "Pure"?...Wanna Know Whos Really "Pure"?
wow seem very smart in religion and da facts of the rules in which they do and dont particapate in but you must not make poeple think your against them but i know that you were gettin your point across which is good to do

Only One Who Predicted That They Would
Say You Will See Death As We See It,
Now Every Single Church Has The Story Remixed,

Mormon Presbertarian Catholic Baptist Non Denominational,
Non Confrontational With Exceptionally Well Skills At Acting......
good ending to a excellent poem it had me wantin to keep reading no matter wat it was apoem that you couldnt pass up the oppertunity to read cause it was an interesting poem that spoke the true and disturbing facts bout wats goin on in the religous part of the united states wat need to be fixed basically not much everythin was on key the flow was there the words were not to simple and to offensive so i dunno why they are flippin out on it but i htink it was a really good peice i give it a 9/10 for the creativity imaginary quality and wordplay
good job and keep writin man youll be great at this [/B]

couldnt have said it better