A Passionate Night wit DiverseSyndicate !!WARNING!! ~strictly for tha ladies~

[sILLable]

this is for tha ladies


uh yea

ya frame is sexy,almost made me loose it//
applyin warm kisses to your inner thighs while i groove it//
tongue slide down ya belly my passion ive prooven//
cant wait to make ya pussy loosen//
tongue sweeps past ya shaven crotch//
you watch as my tongue works and you get hot//
u confess im tha best,drawn my tongues attention to your breasts//
nipples caressed,this aint a test//
this is heat of sex,words perplex my dicks like a hex//
it puts one on ya and ya cant stop takin it//
ya back im gladly breakin it,tha bed still shaken-shit//
now my tongue glides to your neck,while i penetrate you keepin tha moans in check//
gettin heavier as were thrustin,lustin to keep kissin and touchin//
now my finger circles your clit as i stay pushin wit my dick//
i bend you over and slide in deeper,take a break after a while so i can roll some reefer, sounds dont pound louder than us from tha speaker, break my beeper so it quits goin off//
this dank shit makin me cough//
now its tha heat of tha moment,best to jump on it//
insertion from behind,your climax continues to climb,fuckin and fuckin just to hear you whine//
you clame your mine, rake me wit nails, even blind i could read you like brail//
tha passion come close and you cum bitin my ear,,i cum simultaneously fightin tha tear//
heavy breathin now tha anticipations over,,but im not, so lets fuck till were sober,

[sILLable]

uppin

[Prince Escobar]

umm i guess i dont fit into your requested poetic clientele but i thought i'd peep wut u was servin it was a chill piece, it kinda painted a picture it was a little OVERgraphic in my opinion it was kinda sensual and then it got a little rough at the edges but it was descriptive and u got your point across, i dont want to dwell on its low peaks but the ending didnt do the rest of the poem justice though it is very real, i feel it overall, good job, could u drop an opinion on my piece dogg? just askin dont feel obliged, 1luv.

[sILLable]

well my intention wasnt that i perfer only ladies to reply its just most ladies will be feelin it more than most kats,but all can peep.it actually got cut off so that wasnt the ending,the coma was the last thing there so it accidentally got cut off ill rewrite tha whole thing since it cut off a good chunk.

[Content]

Alright..you Have Definately Taught People How
To Have Sex If Anything LOL

I Know This Is Strictly For The Ladies But Your
Rhyme Scheme Was Decent And Even How
You Went To The Drugs The Story Was Still
On Point...You Did This A Lot Better Than Most

Much Props Homie..Peace

[DaGyrlRemarqabL]

Sup D.S.
I was feelin this..and not just cuz ima lady (even tho that was some of it, heh) But really, the imagery was very intense, the flow made it easy to follow, and the piece itself just drew you into it.

>take a break after a while so i can roll some reefer, sounds dont pound louder than us from tha speaker,

That was my favorite ^part, it just rolled off my tongue when I read it..
Great execution of an age old concept~gettin it in~
Ive always wanted to try writin a piece like this...
would've been nice to read the end, if it got cut off like you said.
Nicely done tho.
Pz and propz.

[sILLable]

uppin

[The End]

Originally posted by DaGyrlRemarqabL
Ive always wanted to try writin a piece like this...

^ I think you should, and PM me when you do.

[DaGyrlRemarqabL]

LOL^, ooh baby.

[BADASSBITCH4LIFE]

now its the heat of the moment,best jump to it
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
this was my favorite line but tha best was tha last becuz throught this piece i was thinkin that u love this gurrl or somthin but then wen u said~~~~heavy breathin, anticipations over,but im not,lets keep doin this till were sober~~~~that threw me off.so above all this was good! keep droppin! im out~1~

~Pz~

[Prince Escobar]

just cause one is intoxicated does not mean that the sex is superficial, hide your ignorance i didnt necessarilly interpret that they were in love though so i guess it shows how two people can have a difference of opinions, once again good job DS

[Civilized Rebel]

I just remembered I don't shave my crotch. Though my life is a crotch.

Bah!

Good watching out though, anyway.

~Shalom~

[Varentao]

*does nails, puts on scarlet red lipstick and goes in for a 10 hour wax session*..

Well sweety, i liked it. Was very decent. Makes one wonder....what you look like?!

*Heel breaks, clock strikes 12, runs off into the distance..*..

..resp...

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uppin thnk for tha replies