sad story, (please read)

[dice-roller]

i gave you all you could need and all you could have
running away to see you and cummin home 2 my dad
gettin hit but thinkin of you it was worth it, and im glad
thinkin about u makes my chest hurt & makes me think sad
I could of cried till i died but ill held it all inside, for myself
sitting in my room holding that picture of u that lies on my shelf
everytime i think of you i feel a shiver go up my spine
then i think to myself........... David you will be fine
you used me as if i were a living soul dart board
my heart was the red in the middle & u hit me with every shot
i fought to be with you and struggled when it hurt to kiss you
now that its all over all i do now is miss you and want u here
but now im gonna live with fear of myself cuz i wont shed a tear
but now i want you to know...........the next shot you hear
was me. killing myself while lookin in a mirror with your picture

[GunRunna]

man that was felt, that was really felt

[dice-roller]

can i get some people to check this out
for me and post what yall think please
holla atcha

[Prince Escobar]

that shit was real deep i like it man, i know how u feel and the end line was pure dopetry many props and stay up, its a shame more people dont check the poetry forum. could u peep my piece passed rain? thanks man, 1luv.

[dice-roller]

ne1 wanna read this for me and tell me what
they think please

[GunRunna]

this man needs some people to check out his skill

[Crash]

dayum this pieace is.........deep

[southsideloco]

that drop was real deep, man were do peeps get these skillz

[dice-roller]

thanks ta both yall with ya feed back.............
yall jus gotta put ur all inta everything and
thats what you get is that kinda stufff i wrote
up there............................................. ..............
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tell me what you think people

[doggsoldya]

yo i dig that, it's real. From the soul, that's how poetry should be, it's a prime example. keep it up

[dice-roller]

thanks to the people above//////////////////////////
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more always needed and i would be pleased to
read what you think

[KeMy$t]

That was tight. Emotionally shit is the only way to write nice work.

[dice-roller]

aight thank playa ^^^^^^^^^^
check this out for me people

[dice-roller]

Can i get some people to peep this for me

[Split-eyez]

wow very touching
keep writing straight from the heart
I really felt this... really deep