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Thread: I don't get it

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    I don't get it

    Just the other night, you invited me to your house
    put your sibling to bed, then made out on the couch
    at that time, i loved you more then you could ever know
    stayed there so long, i missed my favorite show
    but that didn't matter to me
    knowing that you were there, beside me
    holding my hand, never letting go
    looked at your face, knew something was wrong tho
    i asked what's wrong, but you said nothing
    but i knew there was something
    when i got home, i felt really bad
    i knew i left you, feeling all sad
    a few days had gone by, what happend next
    i would have never of guessed
    you tell me that you feel smothered
    i tried so hard, not to be bothered
    you came right out and said it's OVER
    now i'll never say, i'll see you tomorrow


    It's short but i don't care,
    say what you want

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    this was alright....yeah sometimes poems can be good for venting ya know...this piece is urs and thats how u feel and thats a good thing...

    i know u couldve done it better and couldve use more descriptive words and more imagery can be good too...but yeah

    i like it!>.keep droppin

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    yeh thanks

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    keep uppin

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    come on people
    give me some feedback

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