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June 7th, 2003, 01:52 AM
#1
Obama 08 :)
~There'll Never Be Another Me~
some shit i wrote ...............yo
wanna share it wit ya'll
There'll never be another me
Promises broken, chances blown
Bitter tears and feelings thrown
Phony smiles and broken hearts,
Something's tearing us apart
I can't leave, but I can't stay
And I can't believe these games we play
What is it that we did wrong?
Because all the happiness is gone
Before you turn to walk away,
And say those things I know you'll say
Take one good look at what you see
There'll never be another me
Quiet stares and empty words
A cry for love that goes unheard
Painful silence, angry eyes
Emotions that can't be disguised
The laughs and smiles have disappeared
There's no doubt something's missing here
Things are changing, by and by
In ways we can't ask how or why
Confusion's hitting more and more
What exactly are we looking for?
Before you leave and don't come back,
Before you run to where someone else is at
Take one good look at what you see
because there'll never be another me
HOLLA wit Critism.............yo
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June 7th, 2003, 01:59 AM
#2
aww thas really good....that was really sad tho...but itz was nice...
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June 7th, 2003, 02:09 AM
#3
very deep and i felt
wat u was sayiin...
i mean cuz there will
never be anybody like
'you'( meaning everybody in
general)..very nice piece tho..pz
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June 7th, 2003, 11:26 AM
#4
Obama 08 :)
^^^^^^^^^^^^Thanks for the feedback Chyna N Dezire.......i apreciate it................
UPPUN
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June 7th, 2003, 11:38 AM
#5
Deep fam.........that was some good ish
Emotion's i like tht in a piece
keep it goin
-one love-
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June 7th, 2003, 12:30 PM
#6
nice m'n--liked the verse a lot--short an full of emotion--nice m'n--much luv---peace
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June 7th, 2003, 07:48 PM
#7
Obama 08 :)
Thanks For the Feedbacks i apreciate it yo.........................
UPPUN
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June 8th, 2003, 09:18 PM
#8
YO dat shit was tight....Man I can relate...
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June 8th, 2003, 10:23 PM
#9
Newbie
Werd^^i can relate to most of that...definitly feeling it, tyte drop
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June 9th, 2003, 01:23 AM
#10
In The Shadows...
Hmmmmmmm, I liked this one a lot........
I was gonna put my favorite line but I really like the whole thing.
It was nicely done......keep spittin'
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June 9th, 2003, 05:23 PM
#11
Obama 08 :)
^^^^^^^^^^Thanks i apreciate the comments and feedbacks....yo.......this would be in the RB LEGENDS...lol but i cant nominate it myself
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June 9th, 2003, 05:33 PM
#12
You've Earned a Custom Title!
damn, that's like an expression of my feelings...keep droppin, all your poems are read so far are tight.
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June 9th, 2003, 06:04 PM
#13
You've Earned a Custom Title!
Re: ~There'll Never Be Another Me~
There'll never be another me
Promises broken, chances blown
Bitter tears and feelings thrown
Phony smiles and broken hearts,
Something's tearing us apart
the feeling of these mighty words just hit me straight to the face...
that opening line "there'll never be another me" is damn good cuz of the fact that its extremely true...its you from the start til the end
I can't leave, but I can't stay
And I can't believe these games we play
What is it that we did wrong?
Because all the happiness is gone
questions that would always be asked whenever things are getting mess up...the contradictory of the line "i cant stay , but i cant leave" held this part strong enough to even stand out in the whole poem..props
Before you turn to walk away,
And say those things I know you'll say
Take one good look at what you see
There'll never be another me
damn!...i read that out loud and just how i said it made me weak and sad....cuz those moments ya know like when ur about to leave and while ur walking away ur scared to turned around cuz ur heart might tell ur feet to go back...."there'll never be another me"..thats always been a good line..my fave...nice!
Quiet stares and empty words
A cry for love that goes unheard
Painful silence, angry eyes
Emotions that can't be disguised
like i said...that moment when its just you and her .... the feeling just mixed up with anger and happiness that would all sum up to pain....
The laughs and smiles have disappeared
There's no doubt something's missing here
Things are changing, by and by
In ways we can't ask how or why
the pain, arrgh!...i liked this!
Confusion's hitting more and more
What exactly are we looking for?
Before you leave and don't come back,
Before you run to where someone else is at
this sums it up...all those thoughts for just one question for you to find the answer to...much emotion
Take one good look at what you see
because there'll never be another me
finally...the ending...*sigh* just sooo emotional.....ahhhhhhh my fave line " There'll never be another me"
over all nice man....its funny cuz i mostly have critism to much of the poems here ..hehehe u got lucky im in a cheesy mood...nahhh..nice poem
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June 9th, 2003, 10:51 PM
#14
Obama 08 :)
^^^^^^^^^^^LOOOL Thanks Shiz.......and Starks i apreciate it.................Once again i repeat...lol
Originally posted by ~RuThLEss~
^^^^^^^^^^Thanks i apreciate the comments and feedbacks....yo.......this would be in the RB LEGENDS...lol but i cant nominate it myself
^^^^Who Agree's..lol
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June 12th, 2003, 02:52 PM
#15
well if ma boo think he should be an RB legend why not!
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