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    War Story

    Run and gun was always fun
    you had to make it last you were the first to blast
    coming up in the ghetto
    you would settle for less
    never were the best
    till it came to test
    You had to let off stress
    but that came out in shoots in the night
    never had to fight
    for your rights
    like me and my boys

    Out in the jugles and desert
    napalm blowing in the wind
    didn't know where to begin
    all you know if to survive you must not die
    and the way to do that is to try
    and kill the man before he kills you


    This is an idea of a song tell me what I can do to make my shit flow better....

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    rip it up, throw it in the trash and start over.. lol.. it flowed good, it was just really weak lyrics.. work on word-play, vocab, meta's... hell just elevate
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    EnVy Ny
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    ut bars should of been longer and wasnt feelin much of a flow .................................................. .................................................. ..

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