LLL Week 5: Joe Boston (1-2) vs. Lenox (0-1) OPEN FOR FEED

[Blue Bayou]

verses due: Thursday 11:59PST
Minimum Lines = 12 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines



Extension: Up to opponent IF verse completed & posted/sent. Otherwise at the Moderators discretion.

VOTING CLOSES SUNDAY NIGHT/MONDAY MORNING
BATTLES SET SHORTLY AFTER!


2 No-Shows = Season Ban

NO BITING OR RECYCLING!!!!
Biting results in a SEASON BAN
Recycle Once = DQ
RECYCLE TWICE = BANNED FOR SEASON

Edits:
First Person can't edit after second person posts their verse
Second person can't edit after first vote


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[Lenox]

Sup joe

[Joe Boston]

sup lenny

[Joe Boston]

12

Fuck talking that G shit like you live it, when killing is my hobby
When I carry the stick figure it won’t resemble the size of your body
Your bitch acting naughty, fuck her from behind thumb in her ass for hours
She ain’t got a body that’s resembles a vase, if I had chance I’d escape cuz the pussy smells like dead flowers
His mom still baby powders his ass, Fag been soft for a grip see
Watch him try to run The Marathon when shells hit em like he was Nipsy
My team forever grizzly when we show up your block who the fuck you gonna rely on
Put up the Dukes UCF this is all fucking games when you lose worse than Zion
Give this fag a shoulder to cry on, I’ll slap him again if he show tears
Before I take his Life Alert someone as I laugh when I throw his grandma down the stairs
Dudes been playing the popularity contest for years yet he’s still not accepted
His bars are cringe worthy each verse we read is like a Chinese torture method

[Joe Boston]

@Blue Bayou u can grant Lenny the ext if cool with you man.

[Join The LLL]

Fuck talking that G shit like you live it, when killing is my hobby
When I carry the stick figure it won’t resemble the size of your body
alright solid opener lol
Your bitch acting naughty, fuck her from behind thumb in her ass for hours
She ain’t got a body that’s resembles a vase, if I had chance I’d escape cuz the pussy smells like dead flowers
ehhh this is kinda stretched. I liked what you were aiming for but you could’ve done it with like 50 less words
His mom still baby powders his ass, Fag been soft for a grip see
Watch him try to run The Marathon when shells hit em like he was Nipsy
nipsey*...aside from the disrespect this was cool and current
My team forever grizzly when we show up your block who the fuck you gonna rely on
Put up the Dukes UCF this is all fucking games when you lose worse than Zion
not feelin this
Give this fag a shoulder to cry on, I’ll slap him again if he show tears
Before I take his Life Alert someone as I laugh when I throw his grandma down the stairs
lol nah this is like 2002
Dudes been playing the popularity contest for years yet he’s still not accepted
His bars are cringe worthy each verse we read is like a Chinese torture method
mmm decent at best but not really


You got a lot better joe. I think the time off definitely helped you come back with some fire. You have nice current event concepts as per usual and your first half of the verse was hitting. The second half however kinda slacked.

[Lenox]

I need the ext I was in Staten Island

- - - Updated - - -

I’ll drop before midnight

[Lenox]

@Blue Bayou

[Celph Taut]

Fuck talking that G shit like you live it, when killing is my hobby
When I carry the stick figure it won’t resemble the size of your body
Nah
Your bitch acting naughty, fuck her from behind thumb in her ass for hours
She ain’t got a body that’s resembles a vase, if I had chance I’d escape cuz the pussy smells like dead flowers
It's a dope concept, but it also goes on too long.
His mom still baby powders his ass, Fag been soft for a grip see
Watch him try to run The Marathon when shells hit em like he was Nipsy
Saw this flip already in the same way, decent
My team forever grizzly when we show up your block who the fuck you gonna rely on
Put up the Dukes UCF this is all fucking games when you lose worse than Zion
Not bad
Give this fag a shoulder to cry on, I’ll slap him again if he show tears
Before I take his Life Alert someone as I laugh when I throw his grandma down the stairs
Nah
Dudes been playing the popularity contest for years yet he’s still not accepted
His bars are cringe worthy each verse we read is like a Chinese torture method
Nah



A lot of decent concepts in here and not too bad executions, but you need to be more concise and learn how to clean up the wording so it isn't so drawn out. I think you're up there when it comes to the utilization of current events, just a matter of how to phrase your lines into something short and sweet. Keep it up.

[Lenox]

@Blue Bayou

[JEM.]

Fuck talking that G shit like you live it, when killing is my hobby
When I carry the stick figure it won’t resemble the size of your body
Good opening. Jab.

Your bitch acting naughty, fuck her from behind thumb in her ass for hours
She ain’t got a body that’s resembles a vase, if I had chance I’d escape cuz the pussy smells like dead flowers

Joe man… like at this point I just know you don’t give a fuck or read shit differently than most of us but
how can you not think this is just way too stretched even with the internal? You have some good concepts
but the execution… Yo, like your first bar was so much better than this one even on a weaker concept
because of your execution.

His mom still baby powders his ass, Fag been soft for a grip see
Watch him try to run The Marathon when shells hit em like he was Nipsy

Well executed!!! Thing is, RIP Nipsey I’ve just seen most battles have a bar about him… I guess I have fatigue about this concept.

My team forever grizzly when we show up your block who the fuck you gonna rely on
Put up the Dukes UCF this is all fucking games when you lose worse than Zion

I get the scheme and angle… but thing is, they beat UCF (I see your WP) but because of that it lessons the blow… live stage this gets the OOOOOOH’s you want but when you can read and critique it’s light.

Give this fag a shoulder to cry on, I’ll slap him again if he show tears
Before I take his Life Alert someone as I laugh when I throw his grandma down the stairs

This was alright.

Dudes been playing the popularity contest for years yet he’s still not accepted
His bars are cringe worthy each verse we read is like a Chinese torture method

I think the punch itself is pretty light but it was a smooth read.

If you can just combine your good concepts + your good execution… you would be a problem.