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    Issue 46

    "Issue 46"
    By Sammy


    “Damn bro, you’re getting married! Congrats!”
    “Thanks, bro, I’ll be in touch.”

    “Yo, Sammy, what u doin Saturday? ”
    “Nothin much.”
    “Word? Lets meet for lunch!”
    “Yeah sure”
    “i’ll pick you up”
    “Aite, i’ll be up front.”

    Its been three weeks and some change.
    Well more appropriately its been thirteen years since we met.
    two strangers in sixth grade until Mrs Clark made arrangements and paired up our desks.
    I'd stare at his sketch.
    A vehement effort of an X-Men etched…
    on the upper left of his loose leaf sheet.
    “That dude Beast?"
    “Yeah, man, yeah he is!”
    We bonded over comics, Inseparable...ever since.

    “Yo I got the New Gods, issue 46!”
    Perfectly printed. Gorgeous. Mint. Colors popped as Orion socked Kalibak with his orange fist
    Polyester propped with a thin filmy layer of gloss for grip.
    It WAS life.
    We boarded our cosmic jet.
    (ad)Venturing; but never further than Clark’s Convenient store off Neponset
    The warm August breath; aroma of overcooked franks and barbecue smoke.
    And no matter the coal, I could never quite recapture the scent
    Green pasture lens. All of youth’s drawn in optimist gold. We were best of friends. Inseparable.

    But the machination starts when imagination’s lost
    Lost. It was hidden in the the shades, off in the corner. The path of age has saturate the gloss.
    There were spats of grey across.
    The film…
    The film became grainy..tattered. Pages gone.
    Something’s missing
    The texture, pasty. Worn. Abrasive, even. The faces fading off…
    ..faces fading...gone...
    that’s life.
    We knew, deep inside, where we’d always ended up.
    In the end, even best friends can lose that sense of touch


    Written to the topic: "You have lost your sense of touch"

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    Re: Issue 46

    Yo gave this a read @Sammy

    First half was great you had rich imagery through out and you developed the background to your friendship well. The progression was outstanding as it did t lag or get stale. You painted a nice picture that I enjoyed, good diction and turn of phrase. I mean it was solid stuff homie. Second half I thought was better tbh,felt like you where hitting your stride. You transitioned very nicely from one the first half’s tone this the second half’s, made for a smooth read and in turn a more enjoyable one. Yeah only complaint I have is that maybe you could of wrote a bit more of the second half? But that’s probably me just being picky lol.

    Enjoyed the read sam
    DamNation

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    Re: Issue 46

    @Fatrick Swayze my dude. let me know if u need me to feed anything of yours, bruh.

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    Re: Issue 46

    I l like the production of it and how well thought out and laid out it was and can really relate to that lost friends thing and to relate sometimes you do need that one to remind you who are. Nice read!
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    Re: Issue 46

    Quote Originally Posted by A Disciple View Post
    I l like the production of it and how well thought out and laid out it was and can really relate to that lost friends thing and to relate sometimes you do need that one to remind you who are. Nice read!
    thanks, A. i'll return the favor shortly, ma'am.

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