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    MURDEROUS CREATIONS

    BLASTED BY SPACES SPEED imaginating FACTUAL BUT AFTER THE THEORY theres masterpieces
    AND A CAPTION TO CARRY rapping in aspen is INHABITED CHERRY MY ADVESARY can we GATHER THE CHERRYS
    CAN WE HAVE ATLEAST STARRY until we rebirth this whole dang place, well HAVE A CEMETARY roses and BLACK OBITUARYS after the night time theres HALF A CASKET AND THE MASK THAT IM WEARING passive thoughts
    asking god should I HAVE THE SEMINAR or a MANLY PERSONALITY Stanley was a dragon AND I CANT STAND HIM STARING IN ME dick chaney was dragon AND I HAVE FAMILY TO MARRY The CHAMPION OF CLARITY Dampening the Kleenex before HANDING ME THE KEROSENE gasoline and matches theY SCANDOLOUS WITH KEROSENE venomous
    thought process has me thinking I CANT LAUGH TEN MINUTES WITHOUT PASSION INTERFERING always DEMANDING WHAT IS DEARING but EVERLASTING {echo x3} Theres a DANCE THAT THEY CHEMICALLY ARE COMMANDING chemically deranged MENTALLY IM AMITY theres SYMPATHY AND APATHY get RID OF ME IM TANGIBLE.

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    Re: MURDEROUS CREATIONS

    Good flow I picked up on the different type of rhyme scheme. I like your dark concepts as well - I look fwd to reading more
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    Re: MURDEROUS CREATIONS

    I think if you want to produce results, you'd study the words you use.
    this looks like a bunch of slapped together words cuz they happened to rhyme.
    what was supposed to be being said in this piece? I'll wait...

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    Re: MURDEROUS CREATIONS

    The flow was solid but I didn't care for the structure. I am viewing as text and the structure took me way from this piece. A few reads and I was able to follow along. Change that up would but it's your piece so do as you please. Overall solid drop though.

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