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    SirVent
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    TheIllyricist - The Sword

    Wretched and cold, twisted by the maker's hands
    and bent toward a path of pointed fury
    soaked in the life of thine enemies.

    Feared and cursed, spat on by naivety
    and the soft words of children;

    The harbinger of end, the singer of graves,
    but there can be no song
    without the poet

    can there be life

    without blood

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    Re: TheIllyricist - The Sword

    This is close to perfection imo.
    It gets a big YES from me.

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    Re: TheIllyricist - The Sword

    Needs a thorough proofreading, but the content is great. Short and to the point, no fluff, and has a central thought driving it which I always appreciate. I'm a Yes, tho I think it does have room for improvement. A bit more flair, and fix those punctuation errors and you would have a really solid piece of work here.

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    Re: TheIllyricist - The Sword

    I also say yes to this even though structurally it's not as well presented, but content wise I think this is definitely the standard we should be celebrating, so yeah, HoF this.
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