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    SirVent
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    IronMic - Poetry Creates

    Inked incantations
    Encapsulate consciousness
    Carnal catharsis

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    Re: IronMic - Poetry Creates

    doesn't do it for me to an extreme.
    clever, yes. i can see the obvious talent.
    im a bit confused with the vote on this.
    hof? hmm....


    I guess based on that 'hmm' id have to say

    v - no



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    Re: IronMic - Poetry Creates

    I'm all for short form poetry, and haiku as well, but this needed a lot more substance to be HOF. It's pretty with it's alliteration and all, but something this short would really need to be *powerful* to get in here. Save haiku for the HL imo.

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    Re: IronMic - Poetry Creates

    I think HoF haiku's are absolutely fine, but I agree that something this short MUST be something fucking profound and deliver a lot more than superficiality. Not saying that the piece is solely aesthetic; it has meaning outside of it reading beautifully, but it didn't do enough to feel as it merited a HoF on its own. If there had been a few stanzas in haiku form that added more depth to the mix this could easily have made it. Good work, not HoF
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