Professor Carey

[Sammy]

"Professor Carey"

Lost in the...

Pool of her deep blues, I slipped on the slope
Calculation was off, and miscarried the hope
I observed Ms Carey,
Her gold complexion would mesh well with the rows..
Of diamond studded hearts, worn on the cuffs of my coat
As Winter pass, Spring birds began to utter their notes
love ballads. Charlatans of the sky flapping their oats
Fly muhfuckas.
As if us bipedal can repeat their higher standards, you know?!
It's testing me. She's testing me, fo’ sho’
Dress pressing deeply against her flesh. Digging the dips and summits;
Tits and buttocks.
migrating monarch at the pit of the stomach
Summoning something I'd soon to regret
a boner!
Oh shit!
Excavating an elusive t-Rex.
Perfume perusing the soils beneath.
Blood rushed
reaching the tip of my coiled reprieve.
*Deep breath*
I sipped on my coke.
As close to a hands-on experience of her bottled esteem
Trying to figure out a solution to this problem between..
no legs to stand on
A stand off. She knew it.
Her candor. My seam, .
Torn. Crotch gathering an onset of steam.
Her blonde locks locking in
A problem? Believe, muhfuckas!
My chance reflects her physique
Slim waistline wasting no time
The hours are bleak
Hours turn to Minutes
Minutes to seconds;
Second guessing my needs
Education or Ms Carey’s leggings?
Sammy, u freak!

She came.
She saw.
She seized.

[Sammy]

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What up sammy! Well well this came off as a hot piece of poetic rap here. Seems like shes the professor we all wish we had huh. Anyways the dynamics of this piece felt pretty fluid, the flow and imagery kept the read pretty smooth, and sexy like professor carey. Of couse im going to like the Trex line! The progression was strong and i liked the schemes going, couldve brought it to a funny dynamic with what she taught and in the classroom, bring a funny light to it too, every thing was really great until the no legs to stand on part, where i felt like its getting a little wordy tbh, otherwise it was a cool take on the thot track, thanks for the read!

[Emily]

Sammy this was different and refreshing with its brutal honesty of a situation drawn so well. The atmosphere was evident from the get go. Personally what I liked about this were your descriptions which didn't let go at all, instead they just got more intense and piled up on top of each other to where an explosion was kind of ready like a rumbling volcano.
I mean, she sounded sensational. The curves, the lush language, the lust, the admiration, the straight shooting vocab stabbing bits of silk and satin....it was all just so sexual and jumbled and it had an obvious heart beat as I read.
I liked the pace you carried from top to toe. My least favourite line was '...no legs to stand on...' only because it kind of confused me a bit, but I really liked the rest. I thought you had some standout lines for sure.

Lost in the...

Pool of her deep blues, I slipped on the slope
Calculation was off, and miscarried the hope
I observed Ms Carey,

Great intro right there ^^^.
Wording was well done Sammy.

Her gold complexion would mesh well with the rows..
Of diamond studded hearts, worn on the cuffs of my coat
As Winter pass, Spring birds began to utter their notes
love ballads. Charlatans of the sky flapping their oats
Fly muhfuckas.

Another lot of great lines. I gotta hand it to you for the gutsy risk of that last line though.
That was unexpected gold.

Look I could go on and on quoting lines in this. I really enjoyed this piece of work.
I thought the outro was also well written. Smooth. Simple. Stylish.


Good stuff Sammy.

Great Read.


Thank you.

[Emily]

Fed.