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    Desert Mountains

    What does it mean to be constituted by the wild,
    To interrogate integral images of our horizon reflecting pieces of ourselves?
    This question burrows beneath our sluggish quotidian, rising up like a
    Desert mountain that fractures skylines.
    A monstrous fixed point, reminding man of the world’s immensity, while
    Hedging him into claustrophobic valleys—
    mental wastelands traversed incarnate.

    Blood dirt stains feet and Holy ground fashions blisters.
    Deserts are suffering, but the mountain calls.
    Perhaps a sage of antiquity awaits with answers from when God walked by.
    Or the world opens itself when we crest the summit.
    Turbulent ascent breaks down a brittle ego to absorb the land.
    Immersed in barren landscapes to emit its silence, moored by the wind.
    From the soul flows dazzling darkness distilled in eternity.

    The encounter with the mythic other envelops, its hands digging deep
    Form its own primordial rocky roots to mold for you a heart of stone.
    Transformation from this experience beckons pause;
    The self soaked in stillness, one must ascend the peak again.


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    Re: Desert Mountains

    The encounter with the mythic other envelops, its hands digging deep
    Form its own primordial rocky roots to mold for you a heart of stone.

    ^^ favorite here. Turned in a solid piece here. not much to say other than I enjoyed it, thanks
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    Re: Desert Mountains

    I like how you mix the abstractness of the piece with dabs of vocab. To me as a vocab head, it really pushes the imagery forward to these colors of beige and light blue. I like poems that define the edges with complex wording as I view it as the attention to detail to fade into the rest of the imagery. Being that I am in the desert I do take a personal note from it even as of now I am looking at the red and beige hues of the mountains from my office window. I can appreciate the words here and see your poem play out in physical form. Good poem


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