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@ILLunatic @Joe Boston
Joe Boston
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Verses Due Tuesday Midnight
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@ILLunatic @Joe Boston
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Lol thanks
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You was once close to being promising, now there's simply no hope
Check the mags...
...it's sad how Joe's the only one laughing desperately at his own jokes
& B, your complexity's no threat to me. Watch him drop like a felony
Washed up & only good for one lines like Booty Call and Bill Bellamy
Don't get me started on the figure 8, make no mistake I'm talkin Boston Mass
All that weight shoved in a wrinkled shirt & tie, & he's the one talkin trash?
Man, we wish you'd die from a heart attack. May be cold but it's truth son
Got a 9, .40, AR, Shotty... go ahead end it all, all you gotta do is choose one
Answered for 10 lines, you thought vid and got geeked w/ affection, bitch
I'd never record for some Mall Cop turned Hotel Receptionist
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I hid iLL's verse
Id never let this retard behind the wheel hes such a fucking wreck
Before someone gave a Lincense to ILL id slice him with a Beastie Boyz vynl to the neck
Ur bitch neglects giving u pussy but breaks me off when i come over
The way she offers head youd think she was Madonna persuading Hillary voters
My heart is colder ill manually tear out your fucking organs
Come to your house Luna and make sure blood covers every area of wood flooring
Your boring everyone to death ur text has a fucking dry phaze
The way u custard up concepts i should beat u over the head with every fucking pie tray
Im doing this my way bending the fucking rules
Twin Glocks bet u say no to number 2 like a petition for charter schools
@ILLunatic @KnowP open for votes,
Votes please fuckkkkkkkkk!!!!!!
haha, pretty dope battle... both were good reads... Holy fuck, Joe is no longer stretching bars and he's now pretty good!
okay so lets get to it.
Ill -
Own jokes was cool, bill Bellamy line was dope to me, albeit for nostalgia reasons, the trash line was dope, and the rest was okay.
Joe -
the beastie Boyz was pretty raw, felt the explicit route, the Hillary voters was pretty cool, wasn't feeling the flooring line too much it was okay to me, but thought the charter school was dope.
I am siding with ill here just because it was a bit cleaner... and the execution was top notch which made the not so great lines more passable.
v/ill
You was once close to being promising, now there's simply no hope
Check the mags...
...it's sad how Joe's the only one laughing desperately at his own jokes
lite personal
& B, your complexity's no threat to me. Watch him drop like a felony
Washed up & only good for one lines like Booty Call and Bill Bellamy
lol this was aight wit the throwback reference
Don't get me started on the figure 8, make no mistake I'm talkin Boston Mass
All that weight shoved in a wrinkled shirt & tie, & he's the one talkin trash?
could of been solid but ended weak
Man, we wish you'd die from a heart attack. May be cold but it's truth son
Got a 9, .40, AR, Shotty... go ahead end it all, all you gotta do is choose one
this was weak overall
Answered for 10 lines, you thought vid and got geeked w/ affection, bitch
I'd never record for some Mall Cop turned Hotel Receptionist
lmao
vs
Id never let this retard behind the wheel hes such a fucking wreck
Before someone gave a Lincense to ILL id slice him with a Beastie Boyz vynl to the neck
concept was aight but wording slacked hard here
Ur bitch neglects giving u pussy but breaks me off when i come over
The way she offers head youd think she was Madonna persuading Hillary voters
lol I know where this came from. good bar.
My heart is colder ill manually tear out your fucking organs
Come to your house Luna and make sure blood covers every area of wood flooring
naw not feelin the split name flip
Your boring everyone to death ur text has a fucking dry phaze
The way u custard up concepts i should beat u over the head with every fucking pie tray
custard up??? that was a reach.
Im doing this my way bending the fucking rules
Twin Glocks bet u say no to number 2 like a petition for charter schools
naw we don't all live in boston lol
overall weak battle. no fire flamers from either. maybe's iLL's closer. that was LOTB imo. Joe had a couple that could of landed but wording ending pretty sloppy to me. too many damn current events lol
v. iLL
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@ILLunatic @Joe Boston
both of you need to get your 2 links posted within 24hrs or I will close this.
Ill:
1st bar: Mag line was an ok personal... Kinda funny...6 out of 10, 2nd bar: Ok personal, kinda light....5 out of 10...3rd bar: nah nah nah, felt like you had nothing else to say, a rushed concept...giving this 3 out of 10. 4th bar: ok line here, giving this a 5 out of 10...and last bar: eh ok personal, somewhat humorish, 4 out of 10... 23 out of 50 pts... honestly a below average verse...only verse that hit imo was the 1st line, the rest were soft jabs...
boston:
u should use some commas my nigga...just an advice, i think it will make ur verse look waaaay cleaner...try it next time... wasnt feeling the wording, not sure if u had a typo or just did this on purpose...overall the concept was cool on the 1st bar, giving it a 4 out of 10 though....2nd bar was a cool current event, thought the set up was decent, giving this a 6 out of 10...3rd bar, luna wp, wood floor concept...though it was executed very badly...though the twist was okay in general, giving this a 4 out of 10....that 4th bar was cool, the set up n tie up wasnt the best here..i like the wp tho..so im giving this is a 5 out of 10...and last line was blah tbh, thought u ran out of ideas n tried to play it off...but giving this a 4 out of 10...over all also 23pts out of 50...
wrap up:
honestly close match up, both had hit n misses..but im gonna edge this to boston with an overall fresher approach with wordplay n with his concpts...voting boston here
You was once close to being promising, now there's simply no hope
Check the mags...
...it's sad how Joe's the only one laughing desperately at his own jokes
(light jab at best, nothing really o substance here)
& B, your complexity's no threat to me. Watch him drop like a felony
Washed up & only good for one lines like Booty Call and Bill Bellamy
( again,,, nothing hard hitting or complex here...just simple light hits)
Don't get me started on the figure 8, make no mistake I'm talkin Boston Mass
All that weight shoved in a wrinkled shirt & tie, & he's the one talkin trash?
( I kinda liked this... I thought the second bar coulda been worded and ended better, but its a decent jab)
Man, we wish you'd die from a heart attack. May be cold but it's truth son
Got a 9, .40, AR, Shotty... go ahead end it all, all you gotta do is choose one
(regressed again to light jabs and just talking...)
Answered for 10 lines, you thought vid and got geeked w/ affection, bitch
I'd never record for some Mall Cop turned Hotel Receptionist
(light ender....there weren't enough hard hits in here...)
vs
Id never let this retard behind the wheel hes such a fucking wreck
Before someone gave a Lincense to ILL id slice him with a Beastie Boyz vynl to the neck
(light jab.....coulda been executed a lil better)
Ur bitch neglects giving u pussy but breaks me off when i come over
The way she offers head youd think she was Madonna persuading Hillary voters
(No)
My heart is colder ill manually tear out your fucking organs
Come to your house Luna and make sure blood covers every area of wood flooring
(light)
Your boring everyone to death ur text has a fucking dry phase
The way u custard up concepts i should beat u over the head with every fucking pie tray
(decent with execution, not hard hitting as it coulda been)
Im doing this my way bending the fucking rules
Twin Glocks bet u say no to number 2 like a petition for charter schools
(bad closer)
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damn.. I did a whole bar breakdown and then the whole damn thing deleted, not going through all that again...soooo
weak battle here,,, I thought boston would win this after reading Ills verse, but Joe didn't do enough to secure a win.... both had weak punches, I give it to Ill for the attempt at humor and personals....slight margun victory,..
V-ILL
you was once close to being promising, now there's simply no hope
Check the mags...
...it's sad how Joe's the only one laughing desperately at his own jokes
lol ok
& B, your complexity's no threat to me. Watch him drop like a felony
Washed up & only good for one lines like Booty Call and Bill Bellamy
decent
Don't get me started on the figure 8, make no mistake I'm talkin Boston Mass
All that weight shoved in a wrinkled shirt & tie, & he's the one talkin trash?
lol nice one
Man, we wish you'd die from a heart attack. May be cold but it's truth son
Got a 9, .40, AR, Shotty... go ahead end it all, all you gotta do is choose one
nah fam
Answered for 10 lines, you thought vid and got geeked w/ affection, bitch
I'd never record for some Mall Cop turned Hotel Receptionist
lol decent closer.. u mean.
vs
Id never let this retard behind the wheel hes such a fucking wreck
Before someone gave a Lincense to ILL id slice him with a Beastie Boyz vynl to the neck
Nah man.
Ur bitch neglects giving u pussy but breaks me off when i come over
The way she offers head youd think she was Madonna persuading Hillary voters
nice one
My heart is colder ill manually tear out your fucking organs
Come to your house Luna and make sure blood covers every area of wood flooring
mean.. but no punch
Your boring everyone to death ur text has a fucking dry phaze
The way u custard up concepts i should beat u over the head with every fucking pie tray
not bad
Im doing this my way bending the fucking rules
Twin Glocks bet u say no to number 2 like a petition for charter schools
nah fam
I have Illunatic taking this one for the harder punches.
4-1 iLL. upping for more votes.
You was once close to being promising, now there's simply no hope
Check the mags...
...it's sad how Joe's the only one laughing desperately at his own jokes
this was aight. needs to be more harsh
& B, your complexity's no threat to me. Watch him drop like a felony
Washed up & only good for one lines like Booty Call and Bill Bellamy
not a fan of this
Don't get me started on the figure 8, make no mistake I'm talkin Boston Mass
All that weight shoved in a wrinkled shirt & tie, & he's the one talkin trash?
lol. this was aight not a fan of ending with the question
Man, we wish you'd die from a heart attack. May be cold but it's truth son
Got a 9, .40, AR, Shotty... go ahead end it all, all you gotta do is choose one
nah. this was basic
Answered for 10 lines, you thought vid and got geeked w/ affection, bitch
I'd never record for some Mall Cop turned Hotel Receptionist
lol this was funny but as a whole a miss. just seemed lazy and nothing harsh
vs
Id never let this retard behind the wheel hes such a fucking wreck
Before someone gave a Lincense to ILL id slice him with a Beastie Boyz vynl to the neck
Worded terrible. could have been cool
Ur bitch neglects giving u pussy but breaks me off when i come over
The way she offers head youd think she was Madonna persuading Hillary voters
this was ok. would have liked to see a more clever angle
My heart is colder ill manually tear out your fucking organs
Come to your house Luna and make sure blood covers every area of wood flooring
cool. this was nice
Your boring everyone to death ur text has a fucking dry phaze
The way u custard up concepts i should beat u over the head with every fucking pie tray
Not a fan of this..custard up concepts? nah
Im doing this my way bending the fucking rules
Twin Glocks bet u say no to number 2 like a petition for charter schools
nah..needs to be worded better. i see this concept and its nice but this wasnt executed well
Bland battle ILL needs to shake some rust he had some funny bars but basic punches and joe had some poorly worded bars with nice concepts besides that custard bar. but i favor joe verse over ILL here with more connections Vote Joe
4-2 ILL uppin
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