OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1) - NO

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Thread: OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1) - NO

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    OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1) - NO

    My mother died after my delivery. left my Heart torn; bitter.
    So don't fuckin' ask me what made me a natural born killer
    From each day that wind forth, my mind morphed more sicker
    Born sinner, but I prayed that one day I would mourn with her
    Father trained me young sensing a foundation of hatred, I cried-
    But grew through warfare: imagine blood-spilling into a basin aligned,
    To a bottomless pit.
    + I was impulsive as shit, vacant inside:
    Connect the dots and you'll see that I had murder tracing my mind
    Once he nurtured it, my inner-demons could be displaced 'till they died
    Displaying the side of war and in each act where patience would hide
    I dismembered men in every way possible; a corrupt doctor in a hospital
    I became a one-man army with no obstacle; purely unstoppable
    I appear down to Earth, but I am something this world has never seen;
    A.k.a, Morpheus: a walking nightmare that made men forever dream.
    Could slash at ya throat, watch you sputter, gasp, and then choke
    I'm faster than most; I hit in a flash like a bolt:
    That's what I call a 'lighting strike', and I do it until a bastard is broke
    Never wasting the time without taking what's mine or breaking a spine
    Trading blood with 2 men, I'll wrap their bodies together
    Call it a 'Red-Cross' like I'm making the sign.
    But this became a problem as I hunted people to hurt them for nothing
    All the way, I couldn't fight the feeling that I was searching for something
    It seemed I striving towards the invisible, or maybe the residual-
    Of survivor's guilt, but just perhaps...
    It explains despite who I killed, I can't relax
    Restless cause I'm a slim sleeper. each life taken affects my health
    Fuck a grim reaper, when I've been trying to slay death itself

    I remember, just yesterday, our army raided a town
    I entered into deep thought while all else were parading around...
    Powerful silence prelude the battle, it was peace: a story in breath
    Made me realize that every fight I enter I'm hoping I join my mother.
    I suppose there is glory in death.

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    Re: OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1)

    I think this is a Sacred Scriptures Season 15 Week 4 "Dual Topics": verse.
    Does it matter?
    I doubt it. But if it does, I'll confirm it, in case.
    Last edited by Emily; August 2nd, 2016 at 09:00 PM

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    Re: OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1)

    Quote Originally Posted by Emilyinthepool View Post
    I think this is a Sacred Scriptures Season 15 Week 4 "Dual Topics": verse.
    Does it matter?
    I doubt it. But if it does, I'll confirm it, in case.
    as long as its his and he posted it after his battle was closed.

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    Re: OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1)

    I really like this, don't get me wrong, but there's a certain x factor I'm missing.
    It's got great technique but there were a couple of choppy bits for me, not that it was
    a huge issue, just for hof, I wanna be transfixed, and it didn't hit me hard enough.
    There was a lot of impressive stuff, but did I believe it?
    And I'm not sure about that slaying death line. Came off as not convincing, to me.

    v - no

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    Re: OG Maestro - Heartbreak Warfare (1)

    I wasn't feeling this piece half way through. not a bad concept but lyrically this wasn't his best

    vote no.

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