Hard To Be Hip Hop [IP Collab]

[trajik]

Hard To Be Hip Hop
IP Collab


@trajik
Class and Wes once said that It's Hard to be Hip Hop
Used to write like Hitchcock, can't believe I did stop
Fixing to sit with Bics, a beat and a note pad
this verse is pretty quick, I'm needing it so bad
I wish I could go back, when Visions were Scripted
my one true love, it's clear - to this I'm addicted
don't recognize the mirror, getting educated
I'm going through withdrawals, head is vegetative
been memorizing facts, all that's filling my mind
what i'm craving like crack? multi-syllable rhyme!
but damn the craft dulls, it's difficult to be rap
needs sharpen and polish, but dropped the ball in class

@Enoch Light
It’s the passion - the madness - im fastened to rap
Fashioned a craft, perhaps im too attached to this crap
In fact I’ve passed time I think ill never have back
Or burned bridges and paths that I left dead in my past
Its sad, how fast Ive fallen to this bad habit I have
To just sit in this attic stabbing this pen to this pad
These visions are scabs ripped from this sickness I have
These scriptures are intuitions often too illicit to draft
Perhaps im complicit or just miss the freedom I had
Weakened by the thought of my talent leaving like dads
C’mon Noch get a grasp, without rap you’re nothing
Or something, Fuck it. . . . just click the submit button
.done

@KnowP
damn now that ive read and said it, I regret it
not the fetish but left out emotions, gotta click edit
hip hop gets credit for life's successful endeavors
broken and severed relationships just to get better
sittin to encrypt these hieroglyphic flips clever
taken for granted hours often left in the attic
reciting in panic, consuming more bars than weight addicts
because I get irate when the page is straight average
mental state damaged, reading chapters for exams
metaphors and similes become my notes on the pads
Smokin is bad, though fumes are coming from the ink
intoxicating shrieks of what hip hop has done to me...

@yd;
It all started for fun but now I'm heartless and numb
Fuck a fellow artist I've tried my hardest; I'm done!
Every verse that I write fuckin hurts more than slight
Cuz my wrist never healed from the gore and the knife.
Every tendon every muscle every molecule sliced
Carpel tunnel syndrome and a cyst, changed my life in a night.
I can't sign my name without grimacing instantly
So this is what gets to me,
Half a verse and a percocet to protect the little dignity
That I cant even grasp before it too, slips from me.
But this is the cost for me to be heard
My love of hip-hops strong though my words are obscured.
Take it with a grain of salt that's still fresh in my wounds,
And remember that I love you hip-hop; my body's ready to be consumed

[SELF ACTIVATE]

@trajik

Class and Wes once said that It's Hard to be Hip Hop
Used to write like Hitchcock, can't believe I did stop
Fixing to sit with Bics, a beat and a note pad
this verse is pretty quick, I'm needing it so bad
I wish I could go back, when Visions were Scripted
my one true love, it's clear - to this I'm addicted

^This reads like you're giving a monologue -- reflecting on The glory days. The "Class and Wes" line is beyond me. But Visions Scripted sounds familiar. But I think it's Scripted Visions, right? A crew? A tourney? I'm not sure why it rings a bell. On another note: the imagery the Hitchcock line conjures is dope. Also, your emotion towards wanting to write more is a shared one. But as boards like this continue to decline where do we find a suitable outlet to do so? Last of a dying bread I suppose. Pretty nice start.

don't recognize the mirror, getting educated
I'm going through withdrawals, head is vegetative
been memorizing facts, all that's filling my mind
what i'm craving like crack? multi-syllable rhyme!

You got a pen? You got a keyboard? You got the time? If so...just rhyme. But, word. I feel this section because I've felt that craving myself. So thanks to you for making my thoughts flow.

but damn the craft dulls, it's difficult to be rap
needs sharpen and polish, but dropped the ball in class

Cool finish.

Nice verse overall. The flow was on point and the perspective was one I'm familiar with. I enjoyed the read.


@Enoch Light

It’s the passion - the madness - im fastened to rap
Fashioned a craft, perhaps im too attached to this crap
In fact I’ve passed time I think ill never have back
Or burned bridges and paths that I left dead in my past
Its sad, how fast Ive fallen to this bad habit I have
To just sit in this attic stabbing this pen to this pad

^The flow is rapid. Liquid almost. The pace is steady. I also think your wording was crisp. No sacrafical words were offered in exchange for rhyming. It all blended nicely.

These visions are scabs ripped from this sickness I have
These scriptures are intuitions often too illicit to draft
Perhaps im complicit or just miss the freedom I had
Weakened by the thought of my talent leaving like dads
C’mon Noch get a grasp, without rap you’re nothing
Or something, Fuck it. . . . just click the submit button
.done

^Again, the wording was cohesive and well placed. I could track your thought process. Like Trajik's verse I could relate to it all. In fact, that last bar is me every time I write a rhyme and post it.

All in all: I enjoyed this verse too. It captivated my attention with the scheme and the substance was there too.


@KnowP

damn now that ive read and said it, I regret it
not the fetish but left out emotions, gotta click edit

^That's a bravo bar. Flawlessly worded. And completely The truth.

hip hop gets credit for life's successful endeavors
broken and severed relationships just to get better
sittin to encrypt these hieroglyphic flips clever
taken for granted hours often left in the attic
reciting in panic, consuming more bars than weight addicts

^Flow was impeccable until the last line. Just missing a single syllab to round it out. Nonetheless impressive stuff. The rhythm has a ping pong effect to it. Just back in forth in perfect synchronization. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this section.

because I get irate when the page is straight average
mental state damaged, reading chapters for exams
metaphors and similes become my notes on the pads
Smokin is bad, though fumes are coming from the ink
intoxicating shrieks of what hip hop has done to me...

Word.

Overall: this was hard KP. You crafted the fuck out of that scheme. Lyrically, you had shit to say as well. I dug it all.


@YD:

It all started for fun but now I'm heartless and numb
Fuck a fellow artist I've tried my hardest; I'm done!

^Everyone of you have excelled in The wording department. Your first two lines serve as an excellent example of that statement. Nice.

Every verse that I write fuckin hurts more than slight
Cuz my wrist never healed from the gore and the knife.
Every tendon every muscle every molecule sliced
Carpel tunnel syndrome and a cyst, changed my life in a night.

^You killed it here. The incorporation of your real life experience takes this section to the next level. You got a real gift when it comes to tone and diction. There's a real organic vibration to it. Just really good writing I suppose. Yeah.

[Quote]I can't sign my name without grimacing instantly
So this is what gets to me,
Half a verse and a percocet to protect the little dignity
That I cant even grasp before it too, slips from me.
But this is the cost for me to be heard
My love of hip-hops strong though my words are obscured.
Take it with a grain of salt that's still fresh in my wounds,
And remember that I love you hip-hop; my body's ready to be consumed[\quote]

^*Currently contemplating over those lines*

Ultimately: What can I say? I thought it was dope. Great articulation. Clean. Concise. And mechanically impressive.


As a whole: Dope collab. All four of you pulled your weight. No slackadation apparent. Just skills.


Peace...

[trajik]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post8805332

sorry first feedback link took so long, i'm a lazy fuck.

thanks

can't tag you lol

i just noticed your feedback now, thank you for reading.

Class and Wes once said that it's Hard to be Hip Hop is a reference to



Classified and Maestro, formerly Maestro Fresh Wes.

Scripted Visions was the Sacred Scriptures of RIA, which was an RB refugee site until this picked up again. Thanks for relating, that's always a plus. It's true, were do you go? There was a time i wrote 40-60 line pieces a week for the topical league and now I might write 10 lines a week just to get a rhyme fix. Glad I could make your thoughts flow, bro. Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed my verse and the rest of the collab.

[Maximus]

aight fellas this collab was pretty dope in its entirety. I loved everyone's verse on this, however I'm on a phone right now and can't really give an in depth feedback, so sorry about that so I'll just quote some stand out lines from y'all.
" don't recognize the mirror, getting educated
I'm going through withdrawals, head is
vegetative
been memorizing facts, all that's filling my
mind
what i'm craving like crack? multi-syllable
rhyme!"
classic
"
These visions are scabs ripped from this
sickness I have
These scriptures are intuitions often too illicit
to draft
Perhaps im complicit or just miss the freedom
I had
Weakened by the thought of my talent leaving
like dads
C’mon Noch get a grasp, without rap you’re
nothing
Or something, Fuck it. . . . just click the
submit button"
lol nice
"know p your entire verse was quote worthy honestly, plus it flowed so smoothly nothing was off to me and I relate to it completely, props."
" I can't sign my name without grimacing
instantly
So this is what gets to me,
Half a verse and a percocet to protect the
little dignity
That I cant even grasp before it too, slips
from me.
But this is the cost for me to be heard
My love of hip-hops strong though my words
are obscured.
Take it with a grain of salt that's still fresh in
my wounds,
And remember that I love you hip-hop; my
body's ready to be consumed"
dope shit Bros

[SELF ACTIVATE]

@Tajik

Good looking on the video, bro. For some reason I want to say I remember those dudes. I swear I do. But I'm not 100% for certain.

I do remember Rapisalive.com tho. I use to post there for a hot minute, which is why that SV line rang a bell.

[A Disciple]

I love this collab... But everyone seems so negative towards the subject of hip hop. Does anybody trace that wrote it?

[thatdudeB]

Verse 1, was solid or good. Maybe it's just me but nothing special. But it wasn't bad or anything. Enjoyed it

Verse 2, was prolly my favorite. The way I flowed it. And I liked that stab pad with pen line the most for some reason, idk, good lines

Verse3, favorite second, I can't qoute anything or one line. Cause it was good throughtthrought

Verse4, was nice prolly my favorite as I finished it. Liked the last two lines the best

Not gonna quote anything, as I'm not even that eh myself. Nice reading.

[Nigma]

trajik - enjoyed (for the most part) your strict end rhymes and multi usage. the 'to this im addicted' line felt wordy since the rest of the verse was so fluid and i felt the lack of the strict end rhyme in your final line took away some closing impact in an otherwise very enjoyable verse. with the way it bounced off the tongue reading it, the multisyllable rhyme line was probs my fav, good shit.

enoch - cool rhyme schemes throughout, felt content lacked originality and depth in the first half, visions are scabs/sickness i have was a standout line. didn't take advantage of momentum afterwards. too much conceptual wording was sacrificed for rhymes sake imo. not a terrible verse by any means just had a lot of room to grow.

knowp - was a consistent verse. once thing i noticed after reading was that there were no standout lines but also had few misses. consuming more bars than weight addicts was a miss on a very cliche concept to me but had no qualms with the rest of the verse. kept it simple and on topic.

yd - nice closer verse bro. had some standout lines. ill be a dick and call you out on that 'slight' cop out, feel you coulda wording it more sensical. your content felt more real than the rest and i enjoyed your angle at the topic most. also had my favorite line in the collab with that grain of salt in the wound play.


overall, this was a cool topic to write on and you all brought something a little different to the table. the length of all the verses were perfect. glad i peeped this