Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1) YES

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Thread: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1) YES

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    Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1) YES

    There is this woman that I know,

    She suffers from a broken heart, alone in her unspoken dark
    The growing scars are relics of the hopelessness embarked
    She carts her pain and grief in bags that grow under her eyes
    As tones of thunder pries itself below the glowing skies
    Her cries are heard, they fall against my ears like leaded weights
    Head shakes; If this is life, I can't imagine what death waits
    My breath breaks, tried to initiate a subtle conversation
    Her anger quakes, the bridges built crumble to confrontation
    My patience tested, growing lumps in my battered chest
    Teeth chatters, my words are too weak to relieve her stress

    But there's another woman I know,

    Polite & kind hearted, revels in her accomplishments
    Makes promises she keeps, their quite the opposites
    Level headed soul that loves the world that she astounds
    A light surrounding me when only darkness comes around
    Glowing gowns and halos anchored just above her head
    She smothers me in comfort when I'm shoved under my bed
    When life is too complex she gives me answers that I seek
    If I need a friend she's there to lift me back up on my feet
    She greets me in the morning with a smile that lifts me up
    My little gift from heaven, she's my heart, a mother's love

    And then there's her. . .

    Often ripped apart at the seams, it's like a perverse dream
    She loves and hates me in the same flood of parallel streams
    Her moods a carousel spinning, two simultaneous directions
    A strange infection, when not complaining she's perfection
    Misdirected, confusing, she's a mountain of distress
    Countless days I've spent surrounded in her mounting stress
    Depressed - Happy - Sad, those uncontrollable laughs
    An inconsolable soul in times that she's lonely and detached
    Latched to the winding wrath of insanity's grinding path
    I find myself passing the intersection dodging cracks
    It's like she cracked in half, Dr. Jekyll and Mrs. Hyde
    Beauty on the surface of her skin but a monster lives inside
    Pretentious stride to help her defeat the beast thats feignin'
    Pumping Depakene & Lithium to help release the inner demon
    Screaming for God, but good AND evil slowly approached
    They live in the same women, and sadly. . . I know them both


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    Re: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1)

    I felt this was a strong story that easily grabbed attention and made you want to continue reading. The twist was rather interesting and I felt brought everything together in order to tie into the pic at the end.


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    Re: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1)

    another complete story, the 2nd best piece this month in my opinion. fluid, technically sound. progressive. the concept was interesting and i liked the different take he took on it. solid. v/ yes

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    the theory of cause and effect is flawed,
    we expect the outcome to mirror the struggle, that's wrong.

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    Re: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1)

    I was the only person that fed this. It definitely needs to be upped to give it a chance for more feed.
    It's very impressive with its sound writing and storyline. It was a pleasure to feed such talented writing.
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    Re: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1)

    He's back. This is the vintage Kayge that I am use to and the fullness of this verse is what gets me. It's like he creates a full palate for you to dine from when he drops and this is a buffet of some deep and wonderful imagery, He is standing out to me more than anyone except that dude who wrote RB Neighborhood........He may enter


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    Re: Enoch Light - Familiar Stranger (1)

    4-0 Yes

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    the theory of cause and effect is flawed,
    we expect the outcome to mirror the struggle, that's wrong.

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