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    The Illyricist - The Wolf and the Raven (1) 3-1





    The Wolf & The Raven
    The Prelude

    Mantle of night, the darkness shroud consumes the sky
    Winter’s might sings aloud the stab of wind-crooned cry
    As the day’s faint warmth bleeds out the body of the kingdom
    Dawn faded to dusk, drained golden corpse, embodiment of wisdom
    Enlightened blaze eclipsed by nightfall, the domain of horror
    This be the land claimed under the still-reign of Aurora

    Tired farmers return home, wooden house with a fire
    A wife’s loving embrace a welcome place to retire
    Hear her humming soft tunes, lullaby
    Little boy tucked in as eyes close to dreams of summertime

    Green fields painted below the heavenly ocean and the sunrise
    Glittering beams, the celestial shine coasts across time
    Welcoming the sleeper upon a silver-lined bed
    Where weary past fades and forgotten tears go unshed

    Farewell to the troubles of the mourning, bliss be the night…

    But not all Aurora drifts away to the peaceful streams
    Drunken stirs of men hide behind masks, gleeful gleams
    Poured upon troubled faces with the sip from a handle
    Sweet taste of brimming ale by the dim of a candle
    Yet no drink brings back the light of cherished days
    Nor revive the faces of remembered brave

    Nightwalkers all, lost in a present with no home
    Armed only with faint belief in hope to find and atone
    Walking the shadows of time fostered halls,
    But there was one who walked the darkest corridor of all

    Through the icy hiss of winter chill
    A stranger walks with bitter will
    Hooded and cloaked, a clouded ghost
    This man who steps with shrouded hope
    Wraith with dusk-shaded eyes in the dark
    Fading away, his gaze hides no spark

    Deadened grass decays beneath his feet
    Colored leaves crunch to defeated beat
    His footsteps wander upon The Fallen Plains
    As it’s called for the battle it was named
    Where the winds whisper tales from the graves
    He sees – returning crimson stains
    And the faces to the souls he had slain
    Their stories etched to the steel of his blade
    Written in blood, unwanted history he has claimed…

    Midnight strider lost in Aurora; this nation
    Buried bones of the kingdom Rouwen beneath its foundation
    And these plains are but a pillar to the formation!

    Quiet…

    The stranger hears an answer to his pain
    A single Raven, calling out to his name
    Wings of Sorrow glide through the void
    But it’s the eyes he tries to avoid
    Perched in silence the guilt weighs on his shoulder
    His voice is soft: “Can you pray for a soldier?”
    Gentle beak taps with the softest touch
    Yet the strider reacts with honest disgust

    Raven wails across the skies, a tragic hymn
    Reflected of him, fluttered tears dance in wind
    The droplets utter words to heart within
    Fallen echoes remind him of sin
    Until he marches on to find comfort in
    The things that were and might have been

    Lights of the dim, a sign stands at its post
    ‘The Wolves Den: resign and have a toast’
    Weary they come, a traveling host
    By old Greywood where peace be the most

    The storied place of forested sea
    Passed on by greenest leaves, delicate breeze
    Yet no life has grown on these desolate trees
    Not for years under an endless freeze
    Breath of death this malevolent disease
    A dragging end to affectionate grief
    Sorrow of Old Rouwen passed on to those that believe
    Of past and the present the tale that they weaved
    With regretful threads still attached to the deceased

    A creak as the door opens to the stranger
    Dark silhouette of what they see as a ranger
    No welcome to outsiders, simply in their nature
    A woman’s hate sees but in this can we blame her?

    Stalker of the dark dressed as the reaper
    “Freak” is the whisper, the name he is keeper
    Unholy glare of the void, they perceived him
    A demon of nightmares that which they dreamed in
    Though unseen, he knows that they’ve seen him
    From the legends that would speak grim

    He takes his drink and sits alone, a phantom of their hall
    Liquid venom numbs the shadow on the wall
    The tragic plays performed in his asylum
    Are silenced by the poison pool of his quiet island
    Where sweetest death greets tired lips
    Pondering upon what could be his final sips
    Before the last gasp atop the Broken Peaks, private strifes
    Ended with a mournful leap released from The Quiet Heights…

    Gentle strings tug him free of faraway plane
    A single chord echoes ever-laid pain
    And all now listen to the forgotten bard
    Lute in hand of a man grown hard
    Though an angel’s voice still remains
    As he begins to sing, his heart in twain
    Honey tongue brought to sorrow
    Dripping of silver sadness born from tomorrow

    The icy heart of the stranger remembers
    That singer who will be known forever
    As Veril, lost friend found in the embers
    Of life’s fire he thought had been ended

    Strider amongst the divided
    Though united by Veril’s song they are guided

    Drifting upon heavenly twine, warmed by wine
    And the singer’s voice begins to bind


    “These scars, they have burned
    For silver stars unreturned
    My friends have gone
    Beyond the gaze of dawn,
    And heaven weeps of mortal sorrow
    That bleeds upon the morrow
    This song of a long faded lovers' haven
    A melodious cry for the Wolf and the Raven…”
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    Re: The Illyricist - The Wolf and the Raven (1)

    This is simply stunning. Beautifully worded and well structured, it flows and has imagery and
    the talent oozes out of its pores. It showcase poetry and how fluid a thought can be if worded
    in a dreamy state.

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    Re: The Illyricist - The Wolf and the Raven (1)

    The story telling in this was the high point. To be able to progress something with this length is impressive in itself. There were parts when it was a little boring, kind of stagnant. But I enjoyed this the most other than Eng's piece. Aside from the lulls it was easy to read. Ill has a knack for poetics and I like how he's transforming it into om's.

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    Re: The Illyricist - The Wolf and the Raven (1)

    I thought this was really well done. The imagery mixed with the unraveling of a story really captured me. His use of literary devices reveals his abundant experience with writing. Wording on point, some multi's in there as well. I think this is most definitely worthy of a HoF. I vote:

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    Re: The Illyricist - The Wolf and the Raven (1)

    I couldn't help but read this like a Dr Seuss rhyme after a while. Something about the way that it was written gave it that vibe. The imagery was nice, but it didn't feel real. It wasn't written in a way that put me in the setting. Though it flowed, it read with a bounciness that I didn't like. It struck on the feeling I get from some older poetry and narratives a little. I definitely see some influence. Just wasn't my cup of tea.

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