The Darkness Is My Friend

[Touch.]

The darkness it is my friend,
Death closes in, I can see the end.
Cold engulfs me, I feel so numb;
My heart is dead, my life is done.

[Emily]

Another nice little lot of lines Touch.
The rhymes were nice, flow was smooth
and the msg was really good.
A part of me wishes you would put all these little stanzas together
and make a big epic piece that I could sink my teeth into and spend a
little longer here in your piece. To get the opportunity to suck up the atmosphere
of it and have the chance to have more imagery immersed in my mind.
All that sort of stuff makes a piece linger a little longer in one's mind.
I like the simple language. I like the clean cut language you've used.
But every time I read something of yours, I find myself thinking that I wish
it could have gone on longer.
Cool drop Touch. I really liked this one.

A longer piece is just food for thought.

Thanks for dropping.
Peace.