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    Need feedback for my first Rap

    Hello,
    This is Ragzzy-R. I just started Rapping and heres is my first recording.This is for my first track with a friend of mine called MC Deep. Im just starting so be kind .I know I need to learn a lot so any feedback is appreciated.So heres the link

    https://www.orfium.com/track/21633/first-rap-ragzzy-r/



    and heres the lyrics

    Im from chennai and Deep is from Bengaluru thats why i started it like that

    Code:
    chennai and bengaluru team-up to drop bomb
    woofers go up and down im lyrical Leprechaun
    cocks my pen(gun) to  shoot down punch lines
    I behead you with my bars watch me  murder your   fake rhymes 
    we drop verse to give you enlightenment dopeness imminent 
    im verbal stungun,you aint no relevant
    your verse too soft im poetic Bludgeon
    when this song drops every haters head pops 
    cuz my words are like a bullet let the  .45 glock
    You cant reach my poetic enormity
    I feel pity, oh Yeah kitty kitty kitty
    m darth vader u still use vibrators 
    its time for haters to cry and  say your prayers 
    I get high in fame like skyscrapers
    mentioned in every single newspaper
    When you niggas hesitate and stay back
    I'll levitate ridin chicks in my maybach
    Its time for me to have my payback,Plz stop Cuz you just blay Rap
    .


    Thanks in Advance

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    Fucking faggot

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